Some people consider sport to be their career and role in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to keep them fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
Several sports personalities have brought fame and pride to their country, and some have been successful in pursuing it as a personal goalsuccessful for considering that as a personal pursuit. Some people are convinced that sports play a significant role in boosting national pridesports have a significant role and purpose in uplifting the pride of a country. However, others arguerefute that the essence of sports is to help people become physically fitmake certain people become physically fit. We must acknowledge the opposing viewthe belief of others that sport plays an important rolesports have important roles in showing individuals' talentsthe talent of the different individuals. Sport has shownThe sports have signified that a country can display its unique strengthsa country has the ability to display their unique abilities and strengths to others through activities such asto other such as boxing, basketball, swimming and other strenuous sports. Sport has been seen asThe sports have seen as a major attraction that creates excitementan enormous lure which has created impacts and suspense for the sport's proponents. It has eased national tensionsIt has made the country’s tension at ease whenever there is an Olympic match or national sports competitioncompletion. For instance, whenever there is an international boxing competition between the Philippines and other countries, the supporters' attention is directed towardsthe attention of the supporters are diverted on their country's boutthe fights of their country. The international and national sports events often erase the tension and distance between nations and tribes and offer an excellent opportunity to bring people together. For instance, India and Pakistan have their own political issues but their friendship remains constant in cricketthe case of cricket sport. Not everyone can become professional athletesprofessional sports personnel and for them, the sport is a great way of doing the physical exercise and remaining fit. Almost every outdoor sport requires a great deal of physical movement and it can be a great alternative to cumbersome exercisealternative of doing cumbersome exercises. It is proven that people who start doing exercises in a gym often stop doing so because of time constraint or lack of interests. But people who get involved in sports often continue this habit for a long time because of their passion for the game. In conclusion, people who are good at a sport take it as their career and consider it to be a good role for the others. This is, to some extent,This is to some extent is a good way of pursuingperusing a career and inspiring others. On the contrary, many others take sports activity as part of their daily exercises and do not take it as their career either because they are not optimistic about the future of the sports profession or not good enough to be a renowned sports person.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers relevant examples and distinguishes sport as a source of wider social value from sport as a means of fitness. Its main weakness is that the career-and-social-role view is largely reframed as national pride, while the writer's own position remains only partly explicit. The highest priority is to address professional sporting careers directly, develop that perspective more precisely, and state a clear comparative opinion throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed with relevant support, but the career perspective is only partially developed and the writer's opinion is not consistently clear.
Explain how sport functions as a career and social role, then maintain an explicit personal judgement from the introduction to the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a broadly logical sequence, but the lack of clear paragraphing and some awkward linking weaken progression.
Separate the two views into focused body paragraphs and use referencing and transitions more precisely within each one.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, although frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Prioritize natural combinations such as pursue a career, relieve tension, and alternative to exercise rather than using ambitious but unsuitable wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the main meaning, but recurring errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction limit control.
Edit each sentence for subject-verb agreement and complete verb patterns, especially after auxiliary verbs and in relative clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people consider sport to be their career and role in the society. For others, it is mostly a workout to keep them fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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