Students can become very tired both emotionally and physically when they are preparing for an examination. How can they look after their health while they are studying? What is your view? Discuss.

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Sample Response

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It is a fact that most students are stressed when they face an examinationmost students are stressed when they face examination. In order to pass the test, they must focus and study hard, and consequently they get tired both mentally and physically. I personally think that there are several measures that students should takethings that students must notice during this period and the following essay will discuss them in detaildetails.

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It is undeniable that the most stressful part of students' liveslife is when they face examination. The pressure to obtain good gradesgrade and pass tests has significantlythe test have significantly affected students'affected to students' mental and physicalphysic condition, because they studyas they have studied for such long hours in their roomsroom. In certain cases, some students become sicksome of the students got sick after taking an examinationafter they have done the examination, while in other caseswhile in another case, several of the students became depressed and paranoidgot depressed and paranoia.

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In order to prevent negative things from happeningavoid any negative things happen to students during the examination preparation period, there are several things that they cancould do. Firstly, students should learn to manage their time properly. By schedulingsetting their time and priorities properly, they could balance their study and relaxation timebalance between their study and relaxation time. Secondly, during this period, students should also do some light exercises. According to scientific researchBased on the scientific research, it is found that doing some physical exercises will affect the human body's blood circulationwill affect to the human body's blood circulation, which will have a positive effect on brain performancegive positive effect to the brain performance. Lastly, they should consume healthy foods and consume multivitamins, in order to keep their body strong and healthy. Choosing the right types of diets and taking some supplements will help them in maintaining their stamina and avoiding any illness.

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In conclusion, it is true that students could become tired and weary when they prepare for the examination. I believe that there are some things that student could do to anticipate any bad things happen to them, such as managing their time properly, doing some light exercises and consuming the right types of food. I am sure thatI am sure that that, by doing these kinds of things, students will get their maximum results in their exam and they will be physically healthy.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response addresses the health question directly and offers a clear, practical set of measures, with time management, exercise, and diet all explained. Its main limitation is that frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken precision, while part of the essay repeats the problem rather than deepening the solutions. The highest priority is to develop each recommendation with a specific, credible example and then edit sentences for accurate verb patterns, agreement, and word forms.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The response presents a clear view and relevant health measures, though some space repeats the problem and the solutions remain generally developed.

Next step

Extend each main recommendation with a specific explanation or realistic example of how it protects students' health.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The four-paragraph structure and sequenced recommendations provide clear overall progression, despite some mechanical linking and repetition.

Next step

Organise the solution paragraph around fully developed points and use referencing rather than repeatedly naming students and examinations.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

There is sufficient topic vocabulary and some less common language, but frequent inaccurate word forms and collocations reduce precision.

Next step

Check natural combinations such as prepare for an examination, physical condition, and have a positive effect before finalising the essay.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

The writer attempts varied and complex sentences, but frequent errors in agreement, prepositions, complements, and noun forms weaken control.

Next step

Prioritise subject-verb agreement and verb-complement patterns, then proofread each complex sentence for missing or unnecessary words.

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