Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers in different countries get different payments and many people say that teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Sample Response
Education is perhaps the most important aspect of a nation's development and teachers play a crucial role in ensuring quality education in schoolsensuring the quality education in a school. I have to disagree with the statement that teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. In the following paragraphs, I will give my reasons for my opinionreasons to support my opinion. First of all, students in a class are different and they do not have similar abilitiesthe similar ability to learn and understand the given lectures. Some students have to spend many hours studying a subject while others can learn the material quicklydo that quickly. Second, students have different goals for attending schoolgoals in attending schools. Some students want to gain more knowledge and experience that will help them in the future to succeed and build a successful careermake a great career. Others are forced to attend schoolgo to a school by their parents, so theyso, basically, they do not care about their grades or studiesgrades and studying and this might be true because of the age at which they attend schooldue to the age they attend the schools as well. I think that penalising or rewarding teachers depending on how much their students have learnt is not fair. However, I believe that having students evaluate their teachersevaluation of teachers by their students does make sense. Teachers who receive high ratings from their studentsget high grades from their students deserve to be rewarded financially or otherwise. ConverselyOn the contrary, teachers who receive low ratingsget low grades must be held accountable by school authoritiessanctioned by the authority and motivated in other ways to do even better. This will force teachers to continually improve their teaching practiceconstantly improve their knowledge to get a higher salary and will simultaneously improvesimultaneously will improve the learning process. Regular training for teachers is another good way to enhance their teaching skills. Students will have the opportunity to learn from better teachersopportunity to have the best teachers and receive more engaging and comprehensive lessonsget more interesting and comprehensive lectures this way. To draw the conclusion, from my everyday experience and observation, I can say that the quality of the lectures given by the teachers often does not reflect how much a student learnslearn or wants to learn. This is why adopting the payment policy based on student's learning is not a good idea.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response sustains a clear disagreement and gives relevant reasons based on differences in students’ ability and motivation, with generally effective vocabulary and sentence variety. Its main limitation is that some supporting points shift toward alternative teacher evaluation and training without fully developing direct evidence for the stated position. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the argument into distinct paragraphs and support each main reason with a specific, clearly explained example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported by relevant reasons, though some later discussion is tangential and examples remain general.
Add one specific example showing how student ability or motivation could distort a teacher's pay assessment.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a logical sequence and linking is generally effective, but the response lacks paragraph breaks and some transitions are mechanical.
Group the introduction, each main reason, alternative evaluation, and conclusion into distinct, purpose-led paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary shows sufficient range for the topic, with several effective academic choices alongside recurring awkward collocations.
Refine phrases such as 'ensure quality education', 'varying learning goals', and 'evaluate teachers' for greater naturalness and precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer uses varied complex structures with mostly clear meaning, despite recurring minor errors in articles, agreement, and possessives.
Edit systematically for articles and agreement, especially forms such as 'a student learns' and 'students’ learning'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers in different countries get different payments and many people say that teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
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