Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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At the present time, modern technology has created a monocultural worldmono-cultural world. Due to the internet, rapid communication facility, improved transportation facility, TV, satellite channels etc. people are sharing similar information and the modern technology has made it possible to access data very easily. People all over the world are using similar technology, accessing the same websitesaccessing same websites, watching the same movieswatching same movies and following the same fashion stylesfollowing same fashion styles. As a consequence, traditions and lifestylesthe tradition, lifestyle and way of life all over the world are becoming more similarare getting similar. Therefore, people are widely accepting cultures, fashions and trends of other countries and sometimes forgetting their own cultures. I partially disagree with the statementrubric above and I will explain this position belowit'll be shown in the following essay. Currently, almost in every home has their own TV and the same content is shown on itthe same data are shown on it. Channels all over the world are broadcasting programs and people are accessing more international channels than national onesmore international channels than their national channels. For instance, when I was younger I used to watch one TV show and amazingly, my friend from another country also watched it every day. Another example is thatAnother example can be, during an international sporting eventwhen there is any international sports event, people all over the world are watching it at the same time. It's obvious from my example that it doesn't matter where you livewhere you are living; the mass media are similarthe mass media is the same in every country. Thus, the influence of TV and the internet is quite enormous in creating a single culture. Yet, this influence is only partialthis is partial as many people around the world are still struggling to earn their daily bread and suchthe technological facilities are inaccessible to them. However, people's opinionsthe opinion of human beings shouldn't rely on only the mass media. People should limit their use of technologylimit themselves from the technology that we have nowadays. Because the consequences aren't just going to come in a psychological way but in a physical way as well we should be very wary of this. For example, while an individual is working in front of the computer his body is adjusting itself because in a chair the person's whole body weight rests on their backthe whole mass of person lays on his back and in the near future it can cause fatal diseases such as numbness or even paralysis. This example clearly shows that the mass media is impacting on people only partially but not entirely. The modern technology has made our life easier and more convenient and yet there exist many demerits that we can’t deny. After analysing both benefits and drawbacks of modern technology, I've concluded that the modern technology has indeed reduced the distance and gap among nations but the difference still persists.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The essay offers a nuanced position that technology encourages cultural convergence without eliminating all differences, and its television and shared-event examples support this effectively. Its main limitation is focus: a substantial discussion of posture and physical illness does not explain world culture and interrupts the argument. Prioritise relevant counterarguments, such as unequal access and persistent local traditions, and remove unrelated health effects.

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IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.0
Scoring rule

The partial disagreement is clear and supported by relevant media and unequal-access points, but the extended health discussion is irrelevant to whether technology creates one culture.

Next step

Develop cultural resistance through local traditions, languages, or unequal access instead of discussing physical effects of computer use.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The response initially moves coherently from convergence to its limits, but absent paragraphing and the abrupt health digression disrupt overall progression.

Next step

Organise one paragraph on cultural similarity and another on reasons diversity persists, then conclude by weighing those strands.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

There is sufficient vocabulary for media, technology, and culture, but repetition and frequent inaccurate collocations limit precision.

Next step

Use natural terms such as 'cultural convergence,' 'access the same media,' 'technological inequality,' and 'retain local traditions.'

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

Complex ideas are attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, sentence boundaries, pronouns, and clause construction sometimes impede clarity.

Next step

Break run-on sentences into complete clauses and check subject-verb agreement in sentences about homes, media, and traditions.

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Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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