Some people say that television is a very useful tool when it comes to education. Others argue that television is a much overused, ineffective teacher. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion as to the usefulness of television as an educational tool.
Sample Response
There is a lot of controversy over whethercontroversy on the topic whether TV can play thea role of a teacher. Some people hold the view thathold a viewpoint that it can never be educational at all. Others, howeveralthough, disagree, referring to TV's high potential forof teaching through amusement. As a matter of fact, television nowadays can hardly be called educational. All those talk shows and soap operas we see every day are a complete waste of time and can even have negative effects by distracting young and undisciplined people from their studies. Moreover, most of thethe most of the so-called educational programs onin channels like National Geographic channel can not replace books and academic lectures because they tend to entertain people and do not aim to providehave not an aim to give in-depth, focused knowledgedeep and concentrated knowledge. However, TV can be a powerful meansmean of delivering information and a useful part of the learning processa nice part of learning process. Educational Methodists have proved that the more senses are involved at the time of studying; the more effective result can be achieved. Television produces both picturespicture and sound, so its usefulness is obvious. Many teachers already make active use of this advantageuse this advantage actively by showing students videos that serve as supplementary materialvideo cassettes which go as supplementary material to many language courses. So why not broadcastwhy not to broadcast such movies through television? The problem of the ineffectiveness of television as an educational tool lies not with television itself but with the peopleis in fact not a problem of television itself, but of people who decide the content of the particular channel. It is highlyhardly unlikely that content directors would abandon their high profits and replace talk shows with lectureschange talk shows to lectures and video lessons. Therefore, those whothose, who insist on the uselessness of TV, maybe right, but let us not forget that as technology improves new cheap ways of broadcasting appear, for instance, video broadcasts. They can prove the exclusive power of such learning tool as television.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its balanced exploration of television’s limitations and educational potential, supported by relevant examples of entertainment programming and classroom video use. Its main limitation is a somewhat unstable final position, compounded by the contradictory phrase “hardly unlikely,” while recurring awkward collocations reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to state the opinion unambiguously and develop the content-versus-medium distinction more consistently throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed with relevant explanations and examples, but the final opinion is not expressed with complete clarity.
State a precise position in the introduction and conclusion, then make each main point explicitly support that position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through contrasting perspectives, although the single-block presentation weakens paragraph-level organisation and some linking is awkward.
Divide the discussion into clear paragraphs for the opposing view, supporting view, and final judgement, using fewer mechanical transitions.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a good range of topic vocabulary, but recurring inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations such as “powerful mean” and “have not an aim” with natural, context-appropriate collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of sentence structures is used and meaning remains clear, despite recurring errors with articles, prepositions, negation, and clause construction.
Proofread complex sentences for article and preposition accuracy, and check that negative constructions express the intended meaning.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that television is a very useful tool when it comes to education. Others argue that television is a much overused, ineffective teacher. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion as to the usefulness of television as an educational tool.
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