Watching television is bad for children.
Sample Response
Television is ubiquitous these days; I have not come across a single householdcome across single household where there is no TV. But is watching TV good for children? Well, I am a strong believer that anything done in moderation is good and the same applies to childrensame goes with children watching TV. Firstly, with the omnipresence of TV, it is impossible to keep children away from it. Moreover, TV provides an efficient source of learning for children if the right channels are watchedif right channels are watched. We are generally ableWe generally are able to grasp and remember more things when we see and hear rather than read it and here is where TV is really useful. These days we have different channels focusing only on children like cartoons or more educational channels like animal planet, discovery channel etc. All these channels help in educating children effectivelyin an effective manner. It is often seen when the children are really young around 1-2 years, they react to TV; whenever a song is being played, they start dancing, and they often listen to songs and starts singing. This definitely suggests that TV helps children in their development and makesmake them active. Admittedly, TV also has some negative effectsimpacts on children. Sometimes, they spend too much time watching TVsquander too much time in watching TV and watching inappropriatewrong channels can also have a negative influence on them. Therefore, it isTherefore it is of utmost importance that parents keep a close eye on their children. With the advent of technology, we now have televisions with a child-lock systemtelevisions with child lock system in place, which cancould prevent children from watching unsuitableirrelevant and adult channels. Parents should emphasiseextol the importance of watching news channels to develop children's general knowledgeoverall general knowledge of children. When I was growing up, my parents made sure that I watchedwatch the news for at least half an hour a dayhalf an hour in a day. This really helped me in improving my General Knowledge and I gradually developed the interest in politics and also watching different debates and group discussions helped me improving my speaking skill and as a result, I won several prizes in debates and quizzes at school and college level. In a nutshell, I think as every coin hasas two sides, so does television. Watching TV in moderation and under parents’ guidance is good for children'schildren entertainment and learning but it is important that parents monitor the channelskeep a check on the channels that their children watch and the amount of time they spendamount of time being spent on watching TV.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s clearest strength is its consistent moderate position, supported by practical discussion of educational content, parental supervision, and a detailed personal example. Its main limitation is that all ideas appear in one long paragraph, the benefits receive more development than the harms, and frequent language errors reduce control. The highest-priority improvement is to organise benefits and risks into separate balanced paragraphs and edit agreement, articles, and verb patterns carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly challenges the absolute claim and supports a moderation-based position with relevant benefits, risks, and parental controls.
Develop the negative effects beyond excessive time and unsuitable channels so the evaluation is more balanced and analytically complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
A logical movement from benefits to drawbacks, safeguards, and conclusion is visible, but the unbroken paragraph and lengthy personal example weaken organisation.
Use distinct paragraphs for the position, benefits, risks and safeguards, and conclusion, while shortening the personal illustration.
Lexical Resource
The response shows some range through words related to media, education, supervision, and technology, but several choices are unnatural or misused.
Use precise, natural alternatives for expressions such as “efficient source of learning,” “extol the importance,” and “develop overall general knowledge.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex sentences conveys the main ideas, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and clause structure are noticeable.
Proofread every sentence for missing articles and verb-pattern errors such as “starts singing,” “helped me improve,” and “made sure that I watched.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Watching television is bad for children.
Your response
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