In recent years terrorism in Pakistan has increased. What are the possible causes and solutions to this?
Sample Response
Terrorism is now a worldwide phenomenon. It has spread its destructive influenceugly tentacles over many countries – Pakistan is one of them. It seems like all mankindthe entire mankind is living under the shadow of fear.
At present, it’s the gravest problem faced by Pakistan. It appearsIt shows its ugly head in the form of kidnappingin face of kidnapping, assassination of prominent personalities, bomb blasts, target killing and indiscriminate shooting down of innocent people.
The root causes of escalated terrorism are numerous – illiteracy, poverty, unemployment, misinterpretationswrong interpretations of Islamic concepts like Jihad, and huge inequality and disparity within societyamong the society. There are some other sources which state that it is a repercussionit’s a repercussion of proxy war in Afghanistan, or it’s supported and funded by foreign agencies to destabilise Pakistan, in order to seize its nuclear weaponscapture its nukes. Pakistan is a heterogeneous society where sectarianism, religious fanaticism, and intolerance are some other root causes.
Terrorists’ attitudeTerrorist’s attitude shows that they do not believe in negotiations. So it’s important to tackle them firmlywith iron hands because terrorism is destroying our society at every level whether it’s political, social, economic, or psychological. It does not only obstruct economic development but now people are even intimidated into leaving their homes. Overall, society is bearing a high level of fear, stress and insecurity.
It’s difficult to hunt them down as they keep changing their hideouts. But if we want to combat terrorism the government must try to bridge the gulf of disparity among all provinces, promote education and employment and buildbuilt infrastructure. The government also needs to clearly state its policies to deal with terrorists and anti-terrorism squads and agencies along with society must work together to reduce this threateradicate this menace.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its broad, relevant coverage of both causes and practical solutions, organised through a clear progression from the problem to possible action. However, several ideas are presented as lists and some dramatic phrasing weakens precision; the priority is to select fewer causes, explain their mechanisms clearly, and match each one to a specific, academically expressed solution.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the causes-and-solutions task with relevant causes and practical responses, though several points are listed rather than fully developed.
Choose the strongest causes and explain how each leads to terrorism before matching solutions to them.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is clear and progression follows a problem-cause-effect-solution structure.
Use fewer list-like sentences and add explicit cause-effect links.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is strong and topic-appropriate, but some dramatic or informal phrases reduce academic precision.
Replace emotional imagery with specific political, social, and economic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is usually accurate, but possessives, articles, verb forms, and prepositions need local correction.
Review possessive forms and base verbs after modal structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In recent years terrorism in Pakistan has increased. What are the possible causes and solutions to this?
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