Too much emphasis is placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examinations is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
The education is the key of future; it is the only way to encourage people to improve their life and environment. Actually, in nowadays testing people, specially students is the common way to evaluate learning process and teachers tend to pay a lot of attention on students score as it was the only measure to check the knowledge. It is developing high level of pressure on young learners.
The school has a lot of objectives, but the mean one is to prepare people for the life. In fact, life is sometime very stressful and hard, and it is necessary to have the ability to control difficulties and having success in hard time as well. Then it is possible that the high pressure exerts on children and students about testing is a way to help them to be strong and to learn face future stressful situation.
On the other hand, to force students to learn some specific things in specific time could discourage the creative and become students in knowledge’s consumers conversely to look for develop skills or discover personal abilities. In my opinion, pressing students having good score, you are achieving that them memorize a lot of information, but no necessary to learn or understanding it.
Furthermore, experts have found around the world that open learning process make more intelligent and creative students, because to be relaxed and feeling comfortable is easy to learn and discover new things; so this way to teach is better to develop skills and improve difficulties.
In the final analysis, in my view, even to learn to control stress and pressure is important and necessary, if the goal is developing skills and encourage the intelligence, it is necessary to decrease of pressure about testing and promote creative process.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove article Original: The education Suggested revision: Education Why it matters: Education is used as an uncountable general concept here and does not take the definite article.
- 2. Add article Original: developing high level of pressure Suggested revision: creating a high level of pressure Why it matters: The singular countable phrase level of pressure needs an article, and creating is the natural verb.
- 3. Use general plural Original: The school Suggested revision: Schools Why it matters: The plural form is needed to refer to schools in general.
- 4. Correct word choice Original: mean Suggested revision: main Why it matters: Main means most important, while mean does not express that idea here.
- 5. Remove article Original: for the life Suggested revision: for life Why it matters: Life is used in a general sense here and does not require the definite article.
- 6. Use frequency adverb Original: sometime Suggested revision: sometimes Why it matters: Sometimes is the adverb meaning on some occasions.
- 7. Use natural collocation Original: control difficulties Suggested revision: cope with difficulties Why it matters: Cope with difficulties is the natural expression for managing hard situations.
- 8. Use parallel verb Original: having success Suggested revision: succeed Why it matters: Succeed provides a verb parallel to control after the phrase ability to.
- 9. Add determiner Original: in specific time Suggested revision: within a fixed time Why it matters: The countable noun time needs a determiner, and within accurately marks the limit.
- 10. Use abstract noun Original: discourage the creative Suggested revision: discourage creativity Why it matters: Creativity is the abstract noun for the quality being discouraged.
- 11. Fix causative structure Original: become students in knowledge’s consumers Suggested revision: turn students into consumers of knowledge Why it matters: Turn someone into something is the correct causative construction.
- 12. Fix contrast structure Original: conversely to look for develop skills Suggested revision: instead of encouraging them to develop skills Why it matters: Instead of plus a gerund correctly contrasts consuming knowledge with developing skills.
Suggested Rewrites
- The education Education
- developing high level of pressure creating a high level of pressure
- The school Schools
- mean main
- for the life for life
- sometime sometimes
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response communicates a clear preference for reducing testing pressure and offers relevant ideas about stress, memorisation, creativity, and resilience. The argument gives little attention to restrictions on teachers, while frequent grammatical and lexical errors make several sentences difficult to follow; the highest-priority improvement is to address every part of the proposition directly and express each supporting point in shorter, accurately constructed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A discernible position is supported with relevant arguments on learners, but the restriction placed on teachers is largely omitted and development remains general.
Address the effect of test preparation on teachers explicitly and support both the concession and main position with concrete examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses clear paragraph divisions and follows a broadly logical contrast, although progression within sentences is sometimes strained or unclear.
Give each body paragraph one focused claim and build it through a clear explanation-and-example sequence with simpler linking.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts topic-relevant vocabulary about education, pressure, creativity, and skills, but frequent word-choice and word-form errors impair precision.
Learn accurate collocations such as 'main objective', 'take tests', and 'develop skills', and avoid translating phrases word for word.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, infinitives, gerunds, and clause formation cause noticeable difficulty for the reader.
Use shorter sentence patterns first, checking every clause for a clear subject and finite verb before adding subordinate ideas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Too much emphasis is placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examinations is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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