Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Sample Response
In big cities variety of houses are available and every living place has some pros and cons. I would like to get a detached house which is more traditional than a modern apartment. In my opinion to live in a typical house is comfortable, spacious and independent. Multistoried flats are congested and have compromised space. Home is the place where a man relaxes. If someone owns a house according to his wishes and needs then he can enjoy his life with friends and family. Independent houses are separate buildings with least contact with the neighbourhood. These houses are having a more covered area, garage, small compounds, backyards and rooms for guests. While living in these houses one can manage to park two to four vehicles in building and cars are more protected when they are under the roof. Ultraviolet light is blessing from nature and it kills bacteria, vanishes the smell from rooms and it is in excess in these houses. A man can enjoy gardening in backyards and front lawn and multi coloured flowers add the charm in a house. I will not like to live in an apartment. These small houses do not have parking place, backyards and separate rooms for guests. Rooms are not well aerated and sunny and this factor put an adverse effect on human health. Multi-storied buildings usually have offices and shopping Malls on lower a floor that is the source of noise and rush. Moreover, any activity one floor above and one floor down produce the discomfort to habitants of that floor. Middle-aged people and old cannot get deep sleep in a noisy environment. Modern buildings management receives monthly charges for the provisions of lifts, water and cleaning of common areas. In conclusion, I will choose a routine house for living. Traditional houses are having more space and are friendly for domestic activities. I will enjoy exercise, weather, and flowers in day life and take deep and comfortable sleep while at night.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use housing verb Original: get a detached house Suggested revision: live in a detached house Why it matters: Live in directly expresses the stated housing preference.
- 2. Use limited-space phrase Original: compromised Suggested revision: limited Why it matters: Limited space is the natural collocation for cramped accommodation.
- 3. Fix comparison and noun Original: with least contact with the neighbourhood Suggested revision: with less contact with neighbours Why it matters: The comparison is between housing types, and people have contact with neighbours.
- 4. Use simple possession Original: These houses are having Suggested revision: These houses have Why it matters: Possession normally uses the simple present have.
- 5. Use floor-space term Original: a more covered area Suggested revision: more floor space Why it matters: Floor space is the natural term for usable indoor area.
- 6. Add building article Original: park two to four vehicles in building Suggested revision: park two to four vehicles inside the building Why it matters: Building requires an article, and inside clarifies the parking location.
- 7. Make locations parallel Original: lawn Suggested revision: lawns Why it matters: Both coordinated locations should use the plural form.
- 8. Use charm collocation Original: add the charm in a house Suggested revision: add charm to a house Why it matters: Add charm takes to and does not require the.
- 9. Use conditional preference Original: will Suggested revision: would Why it matters: Would expresses a present hypothetical preference.
- 10. Use plural parking spaces Original: place Suggested revision: spaces Why it matters: The general feature is naturally expressed with the plural count noun.
- 11. Use ventilation contrast Original: not well aerated and sunny Suggested revision: neither well ventilated nor sunny Why it matters: The revision uses natural ventilation wording and parallel negation.
- 12. Use effect collocation Original: put Suggested revision: has Why it matters: Have an effect on is the correct collocation, with singular agreement.
Suggested Rewrites
- get a detached house live in a detached house
- compromised limited
- with least contact with the neighbourhood with less contact with neighbours
- These houses are having These houses have
- a more covered area more floor space
- park two to four vehicles in building park two to four vehicles inside the building
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response states a clear preference and supports it with a broad range of practical comparisons between detached houses and apartments. However, several claims are overgeneralised or loosely explained, and frequent awkward collocations and grammatical errors reduce precision despite meaning remaining clear. Prioritise selecting two or three strongest reasons, developing them more convincingly, and revising sentence-level control rather than accumulating loosely connected details.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the choice directly and supplies many relevant reasons, though some supporting claims are generalised or insufficiently convincing.
Develop fewer central reasons with specific, credible explanations instead of listing numerous loosely supported advantages and disadvantages.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a generally clear sequence from the benefits of houses to the drawbacks of apartments, but paragraphing and some transitions are weak.
Group related reasons into distinct body paragraphs and use clearer topic sentences to show the progression of the comparison.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but frequent unnatural combinations and imprecise choices limit clarity and flexibility.
Replace awkward phrases such as compromised space, routine house, and day life with precise, natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the main ideas, although article, agreement, and sentence-structure errors occur frequently.
Focus on subject-verb agreement, articles, and complete clause patterns while simplifying sentences that currently become awkward.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
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