The older generation often holds some traditional ideas on the correct way of life, thoughts and behaviour. Some people think these traditional ideas are not helpful for the young generations to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
As the world is rapidly changing in this era of ever-evolving technology, the mindsets of olderold generations struggle to adapt to these changesthe current changes. People from these generations firmly adhere tohold firmly to long-established lifestyles and expect the youth to follow them without thoroughly consideringconsidering thoroughly how it might trouble them. Personally, I am convinced that although youngsters should preserve traditional values, most of the conventional ideas are inappropriateinappropriate to apply in modern times.
To begin with, some traditional ways of thinking can go as far as to negate modern progressive ideasrecent revolutionary conceptions. The clearest exampleThe most obvious example to look at is the violation of gender equity. In some countries, especially Asian ones, women are normally considered inferior to men in several aspects. Not only are sons preferentiallypreferably given educational opportunitiesthe educational opportunity, but daughters are also considered misfortunes in some rural areas. Such a normSuch norm has significant negative impactshas but great negative impacts on young generations since they are brought up with wrong ideas about how life works.
Another equally important aspect is that prejudice might intervene in one’s private lifeone’s individual private life. The choice of educational field, career and life partner is quite different than in the past centuries, and the old generation will have outdated ideasold and outdated ideas about those important issues. Thus new generations should not be allowed to follow those outdated ideas in their liveslife. The older generations have many prejudices and old waysway of life which should not be passed to the new generations as they are no longer prevalent.
To conclude, the younger generation should be made aware of important traditions of the past, and they should sometimes embrace and follow these traditions, but not in relation to important life events and choicesnot on important life events and choices. Many conventional concepts are out-of-date and they should be discarded to keep our society cohesive and ready for progress.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear and consistent position, with relevant discussion of gender inequality and personal choice supported by a concrete example. Its main limitation is that the second body idea becomes repetitive and several ambitious expressions are imprecise or grammatically awkward. The highest-priority improvement is to develop each reason with a more specific explanation while choosing natural collocations and checking articles, agreement, and prepositions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question with a clear qualified position and two relevant reasons, though the second reason is only generally developed.
Extend the personal-choice argument with one specific example showing how an outdated expectation can hinder preparation for modern life.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a consistent conclusion, although some ideas are repeated.
Replace repeated claims about outdated ideas with explanation that advances the argument in each paragraph.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic vocabulary conveys the argument clearly, but several ambitious collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Use more natural combinations such as gender equality, harmful effects, and interfere with personal choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally clear control, despite recurring errors in articles, agreement, and prepositions.
Proofread noun phrases and verb agreement, especially forms such as such a norm, older generations, and ways of life.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The older generation often holds some traditional ideas on the correct way of life, thoughts and behaviour. Some people think these traditional ideas are not helpful for the young generations to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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