Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in the local areas. Others think that people should have the freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Sample Response
In the modern world, there havehas always been contrasting ideas about how people liveto the way one lives, and housing patterns areis one of its main aspectsone of the primary subsets of it. While some people opine that housing patterns should have a traditional tinge, otherssignificant others consider itpropound it to be a matter of individual choicea subjective and individual choice. In the forthcoming sections, I shall discussshall be discussing both aspects and shall present my viewpointwould be putting my viewpoint.
The world we see today is an natural amalgamationorganic superimposition and amalgamation of various cultures, customs and legacies. It has substantially evolved through the contributions of its constituent culturesevolved to the yield of the constituents over the years to be what it is today. The people who propagate the idea of traditional houses to remain the standard housing patterntraditional and customary houses to be the option for housing pattern mainlymajorly do so with respect to the rich heritage that we have. They fear that building houses in a different stylebuilding the houses in the pattern otherwise could possibly damage our architectural heritagelacerate our historical hereditaments. Generally, the whole idea of cultural traditionsparaphernalia connects usen routes us to the cultural lineagegolden cord of lineage that has shaped usthat we have been transfigured from.
The other segment that champions the building of the houses to be a subject of choice and taste puts the liberty and entitlement of people in the mainstream, and I broadly agree with this opinionI somehow second with the opinion. There are various dynamics and reasons for it. The cost of traditional houses, as a matter of fact, is way too heightened as compared to the prices of the new age houses comparatively. Where the elements and ingredients used for traditional ones are quite expensive including stones and the baselines of the houses, new style houses are pretty affordable. Secondly, the old-customed houses are much spacious and follow the horizontal setup, and keeping in mind the growing population, it perhaps wouldn’t be a very good alternative to go for such establishments as it wouldn’t be able to accommodate the comfortable space for all the people to live in given the fact that one building would be occupying a larger space and hence exacerbating the spaces issue. And most importantly, nothing could be more essential than one’s prerogative to lead one’s life the way one wants and hence every dynamic zero in on the “Right To Live” underline that subjugates and supersedes every argument.
Conclusively, it could be said that the housing patterns and the architectural design should be left to the discretion of the people who would reside.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers both views and gives a clear preference, with the freedom argument receiving substantial development through cost, space, and personal-choice considerations. Its main limitation is persistent overcomplication: inflated or inaccurate vocabulary and heavily extended sentences often obscure otherwise relevant ideas. The highest priority is to express each reason in shorter, more controlled sentences using precise, natural collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both positions are discussed and the writer's preference is clear, although the case for preserving traditional styles remains somewhat abstract.
Support the heritage argument with a concrete explanation or example and state the opinion more directly in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear overall sequence, but overloaded sentences and vague referencing sometimes weaken progression within paragraphs.
Divide the long third paragraph into distinct points and give each reason a clear topic sentence and concise explanation.
Lexical Resource
The writer attempts an extensive vocabulary, but frequent unnatural collocations and misused high-level words reduce precision and clarity.
Prioritise accurate, natural terms and remove inflated expressions such as historical hereditaments and cultural paraphernalia.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted frequently, but recurring agreement, article, comparison, and sentence-boundary problems limit control.
Use shorter complex sentences and check that every clause has clear agreement, reference, and punctuation.