Nowadays, traffic is a serious problem in big cities. Why this is so and what effects does it bring?
Sample Response
Traffic congestion is one of the most serious problems in big cities and it has made people’s lives more difficult. Thirty years ago, there were fewer cars on the roadsstreet and people did not suffer from traffic. Today, however, streets are full of cars, buses and trucks. This essay will analyse the most important causes of traffic congestion and will explain the its effectseffects of it. Several factors have contributed to the problem of traffic in big cities. The most significant factor is the largehigh number of cars. Today, companies manufacture a large number of cars and it is relativelypretty easy for people to ownhave one. Furthermore, many families own two or three cars, which resultscars which result an increase in traffic congestionin the increase of traffic congestion. Another contributing factor is the lack of public transporttransports. For example, there are very limited subway servicesvery few subway systems in my hometown, Tehran, and the bus systemand bus system is inconvenient and inefficient. Therefore, people use their own cars even during rush hourin rush hours. The last cause is road system. Most of the streets in my city are narrow and only a few cars can pass through them at oncefew cars can pass through them simultaneously. The problem of traffic has several effects on people and citiescity. The most significant effect is greaterincreased anger and frustration. Every day, people are delayed in reachingexperience a delay in reaching their workplaces or universities. This leads to considerablehigh tension and stress among them. Another feasible effect worth mentioning here is the environmental effect. The quality of air declines because of the exhaust fumes generated by cars, which may resultcars which may result in severe health problems such as asthma, bronchitis and heart attacks. The waste of time on average is huge and this is another major drawback the bad traffic is causing. Overall, traffic is mainly caused by overpopulation and people’s reliance on their own cars. If governments provide more facilities and encourage people to use public transport, I am sure that the level of traffic will decline in the near future.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response addresses both causes and effects directly, using a clear structure and relevant explanations such as inadequate public transport and pollution-related illness. The main weakness is occasional imprecision, including an undeveloped reference to overpopulation in the conclusion and several awkward language choices; the priority is to keep the conclusion aligned with the developed causes and refine article, agreement, and collocation control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the question are covered with several relevant causes and effects that are generally extended through explanation or examples.
Ensure the conclusion summarises only causes established in the body, or explicitly develop overpopulation before introducing it there.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped into causes and effects, and cohesive devices guide the reader clearly despite some formulaic sequencing.
Strengthen connections between related points so that progression relies less on repeated labels such as another factor or effect.
Lexical Resource
A varied vocabulary communicates the topic effectively, with occasional inaccurate forms or collocations such as public transports and feasible effect.
Check countability and choose more natural topic collocations, particularly public transport, road network, and harmful environmental effects.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of complex structures with frequent clear sentences, although article and agreement errors recur.
Edit noun phrases and relative clauses carefully, especially for missing articles and agreement between plural subjects and verbs.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays, traffic is a serious problem in big cities. Why this is so and what effects does it bring?
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