Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
On the one hand, making a change in life person require a different thing. The first one is time, in this contemporary era, the majority of people has hectic work schedule thus, no time for visiting our exploring new sites. The second one is a personal choice, around the globe, there is a plethora of humankind who does not prefer to change their own lifestyle especially older people. They desire to live life in the same way as they do from childhood to the present. Although, without changing livelihood, person exhausting from life, trying new things stimulate them and yield energy.
On the other hand, having a different things experience is also beneficial for a person. In other words, after visiting a new place person have experience and knowledge about that territory. In this digital era, new things also relax a person from stress. If a person lives the same life without a change in daily life, then easily thinks negative and tired from life so, pivotal to do out of the box such as try new food dishes. However, it is expensive for penurious people.
In conclusion, although trying some different render person to life and also useful in many ways rather than strict with no-change rules. In my view, trying different things is a more batter attitude.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Link the ideas clearly Original: The first one is time, in this contemporary era Suggested revision: The first consideration is time: in this contemporary era Why it matters: The colon correctly introduces the explanation and avoids a comma splice.
- 2. Fix subject agreement Original: has Suggested revision: have Why it matters: The plural noun “people” requires the plural verb “have” here.
- 3. Use the plural noun Original: schedule Suggested revision: schedules Why it matters: The plural group “people” requires the plural noun “schedules.”
- 4. Supply the missing verb Original: thus, no time for Suggested revision: and thus have no time for Why it matters: The clause needs a verb linked to the plural subject “people.”
- 5. Correct the conjunction Original: our Suggested revision: or Why it matters: “Or” is the required conjunction between the two activities.
- 6. Use a natural phrase Original: a plethora of humankind Suggested revision: many people Why it matters: “A plethora of humankind” is unnatural when referring to a group of people.
- 7. Fix relative-clause agreement Original: does Suggested revision: do Why it matters: The relative-clause verb must agree with the plural antecedent “people.”
- 8. Fix number and punctuation Original: their own lifestyle especially older people Suggested revision: their lifestyles, especially older people Why it matters: The plural possessive requires “lifestyles,” and the final group needs separating punctuation.
- 9. Use the correct time form Original: as they do from childhood to the present Suggested revision: as they have since childhood Why it matters: The present perfect with “since” correctly describes continuity from childhood to now.
- 10. Correct the noun phrase Original: a different things experience Suggested revision: different experiences Why it matters: The original phrase combines incompatible singular and plural forms.
- 11. Repair clause grammar Original: new place person have Suggested revision: new place, a person gains Why it matters: The revision adds the missing article and comma and supplies a verb that agrees with “a person.”
- 12. Use natural collocation Original: relax a person from stress Suggested revision: relieve a person's stress Why it matters: English normally uses “relieve stress” rather than “relax someone from stress.”
Suggested Rewrites
- The first one is time, in this contemporary era The first consideration is time: in this contemporary era
- has have
- schedule schedules
- thus, no time for and thus have no time for
- our or
- a plethora of humankind many people
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents both general attitudes, uses a recognisable paragraph structure, and gives a clear preference for trying new things. However, the discussion is brief and uneven, and frequent grammatical and word-choice errors sometimes make the reasoning difficult to follow. The highest priority is to develop one clear reason for each attitude with a relevant example, using shorter and more accurately constructed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both attitudes and the writer's opinion are addressed, but the ideas are limited, unevenly explained, and affected by the response being under length.
Explain one clear benefit of familiarity and one clear benefit of novelty, supporting each with a specific example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and basic linking make the overall direction visible, although several sentences connect ideas unclearly and the contrast between sides is imprecise.
Give each body paragraph a clear topic sentence and link supporting sentences in a direct cause-and-effect sequence.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts some less common vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations reduce clarity and naturalness.
Prioritise accurate everyday wording and learn natural phrases such as gain experience, relieve stress, and prefer familiar routines.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, sentence structure, and word forms cause regular difficulty.
Build accurate simple and compound sentences first, then check every clause for a subject, a correctly formed verb, and necessary articles.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
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