Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which one is better?
Sample Response
I think the issue about what is better to specialise in many subjects or choose the one is a controversial one. Each option has its own advantages and disadvantages. Some people prefer to specialise in one subject and know it very well. However, others prefer to extend their range of interests and study many subjects but in less detailspecialise in many subjects but not in detail. BelowBellow I will give reasons to support my position. On the one handFrom the one side, studying one subject in detaillearning something in detail brings many benefits. First of all, people gain more knowledge and experience in that subjectthis area. As a result,So, after graduation, they are well prepared for their futurefurther career in this field. SecondlySecond, they do not spend their timetheir precious time on other subjects. This gives them the opportunity to focus on one subject. On the other handFrom the other side, people who study many subjectspeople who specialise in many subjects have more options to choose from. For example, if a person has not decideddoes not make a decision about what he is going to do after graduation, itafter graduation it is a very good chance for him to try many fields of study and make the right decision. In addition to this practical benefit, a person has the opportunity to extend his range of interests, his communication skills and have better conceptions of things around. AdditionallyAlso, a person has a better chance of choosingchance to choose what they really enjoy doingwhat he really likes to do and achieve self-realisationmake self-realization. To sum up, I think that every person should have a chance to choose. Does he want to specialise in one subject or he wants to take classes in many subjects?
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response's strongest feature is its balanced explanation of the practical value of both specialisation and broader study. However, its position is delayed until the ending, development is fairly general, and the entire essay is presented as one paragraph, while awkward phrasing and grammatical errors recur. Prioritise stating the qualified position early, organising each option into a distinct paragraph, and supporting the final judgement with a sharper comparison.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both educational approaches are relevantly discussed, and the conclusion offers a qualified preference for individual choice, though this position emerges late.
State the qualified position in the introduction and justify it through an explicit comparison of when each approach is preferable.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable two-sided progression, but mechanical signposting and the absence of paragraph breaks weaken organisation.
Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with one focused body paragraph for each educational approach.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for discussing education and choice, but spelling errors and several unnatural collocations limit precision.
Use natural phrases such as broaden one's interests and achieve self-realisation, and proofread basic spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but errors in articles, coordination, clause structure, and question formation are noticeable.
Practise forming controlled comparative statements and indirect questions while checking articles and parallel verb forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which one is better?
Your response
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