Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Learning about the past has no value for those who live in the present. Include any relevant examples
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Some people believe that learning about historical events bringslearning historical events bring no benefits tofor those who live in the presentthe current period. I strongly disagree with the opinion, as I believe that learning about the past has many benefits for individuals and societyevery individual and the society as well, and the following essay will discuss these benefits in detaildiscuss it in details.
To begin with, by studying history, people cancould learn about humanity and how to maintain world peace. From learning about World War I, World War IIworld war one, world war two and other wars, people could learn that wars involve crimes and violencewar was full of crime and violence. Many soldiersA lot of soldiers and innocent civilians became victims and there were some areas which have been permanently damaged due to wars such as Nagasaki and Hiroshima. By studying these horrifying eventsstudying about these horrifying events, it is hoped that people all over the world will realise the cruelties of war and should maintain world peace.
Studying past eventsStudying about past events also has some positive effects on human's health . By learningas well. By learning about the lifestyle of our ancestors such as how they hunted, planted seeds, and atehow they hunt, plant seeds and ate, scientists could predictthe scientist could predict some genetic diseases that modern people are facing. Some diseases might be inherited from our ancestorsgenetically carried from the blood of our ancestors due to their nomadic lifestyles, and people could conductsome research on how to cure these diseases.
In conclusion, it is true that several people think that studying the past has no beneficial outcome to the modern people. I personally do not agree with the statement as I believe that learning about the past events has many benefits for human beings, such as in political, medical, or economic fieldsin the politic, medical or economic areas.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay presents a consistent disagreement and develops a strong, relevant argument that studying war can help societies understand violence and protect peace. Its second argument, linking ancestral lifestyles to modern genetic disease, is less convincing and insufficiently explained, while the conclusion adds political and economic benefits not developed earlier. Prioritise replacing or substantiating that medical claim with a clearer present-day lesson from history, then align the conclusion strictly with the body arguments.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and the peace argument is relevant and extended, but the health argument is speculative and the conclusion introduces unsupported areas.
Develop a second credible benefit, such as learning from past public-health responses or policy failures, with a concrete link to present decisions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion create clear progression, though the final summary does not fully match the ideas developed.
Make the conclusion summarise peace and health lessons only, or develop political and economic benefits in the body before mentioning them.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for history, war, health, and genetics, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce precision.
Use learning about historical events, modern society, study these events, atrocities of war, human health, inherited genetically, and political fields.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally clear, but agreement, tense, articles, prepositions, relative clauses, and missing verbs cause frequent inaccuracies.
Correct structures such as learning brings, society, in detail, how ancestors hunted and planted, scientists can, and people could conduct research.