Some people think that both travellers and business people must have the same attitude to local people and the traditions of countries they visit. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.
Sample Response
There has been a significant increase in traveltravelling over the last few years. People tend to travel for entertainmentfor the sake of entertainment, exploration and business activities. Some people argue that travellers should observe and respect the religious beliefs and traditionsobey and respect about religious beliefs and tradition of the countries they visitvisited. Others claim that visitors are not bound to follow local people's beliefspractice the local people beliefs and should have the freedomindependence to live according to their own set of rules. I strongly believe that foreigners must act accordingaccordingly to the customs and norms of the country they are visitingtraits and norms of visiting country. It is commonly seen that some travellerssome of the travellers do not care about others' sentimentsothers sentiments and they like to perform their own rituals openly in public places. They claim that it is permissible in a free and open societyin free and open society. However, this could have detrimental effects as some people could act violently and createcould act violently and can create riots in societyriots in a society. On the other handside, it is our moral and ethical duty to respect others' religionsrespect others religions. As a visitorBeing as a visitor one has to follow the customs, traditions and traits of the destination country. This will help them learnhelp them in knowing about the culture and other traitscultures and others traits of the society. This will also leave a positive message to the local people. To conclude, I would like to say that tourists represent their country and their acts and behaviour can help in developing a positive image abroaddeveloping their good image to outside world. Therefore, travellers and business people should mould themselves according to the place and situationaccording to place and situation; it is also a natural phenomenon that ‘gives respect take respect’.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is strongest in its clear position that all visitors should respect local customs and in its identification of moral responsibility and national reputation as supporting reasons. Its main limitation is that the single-paragraph presentation weakens organisation, while the claim that public rituals may cause riots is overgeneralised and underexplained; frequent language errors also reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to build two focused paragraphs with balanced, realistic examples of respectful behaviour by tourists and business visitors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but development is limited and one central consequence is asserted in an exaggerated, unsupported way.
Explain how respectful behaviour benefits visitors and hosts using specific, realistic examples that cover both tourists and business people.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a broad progression from the debate to reasons and a conclusion, but the absence of paragraphing and abrupt transitions weaken coherence.
Separate the introduction, two main reasons, and conclusion into clear paragraphs with one controlling idea in each.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonable range of vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations, possessives, and word choices make expression awkward.
Use natural phrases such as “respect religious beliefs,” “the host country’s customs,” and “build a positive image abroad.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms is attempted, but recurring errors in articles, prepositions, agreement, possessives, and clause construction reduce accuracy.
Practise complete sentence patterns and check articles and possessive forms before adding longer dependent clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that both travellers and business people must have the same attitude to local people and the traditions of countries they visit. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.
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