Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
People have different opinions about leadership in a corporation or government institution. A group of people believe that managerial and othersimilar high-level positions should only be occupied by men, while others think that women could also be effectivegood leaders. The following essay will discuss both views, but I personally believe that competency is the most important aspect in term of leadership. For a number of reasons, many people believe that men should lead companiesmen should be the leaders in companies or government bodies. Firstly, from a psychological perspectivebased on the psychological approach, men use reasonratio when they make decisions. Therefore, their decisionsTherefore they decisions would be more logical and reasonable. Secondly, men are better decision-makersmen are the better decision makers when they have to make a sudden or urgent choice. Furthermore, certain jobsAgain certain jobs demand dutiesresponsibilities that could be better performed by men than by womenby man than women. On the other hand, another group of people believe that women should also be given opportunitiesshould also be given the chance to occupy important positions in a company. They believe that leaders should not be selectedelected based on gendergenders, but based on their competency. They also believe that leadershipleader is not purely a natural gift, as leadership could also be learned. Some of the examples would be Margaret Thatcher who successfully led England in the eighties and Hillary Clinton who became one of the ministers in the USA and now running for the presidential election. These women have shown that they have all the competencies needed to becomeall the competencies of becoming a good leader. In conclusion, some people still believe that gender hasgender would have a significant effect on leadership, but I disagree with this viewI disagree with the statement. I personally believe that competency and experience of the individual, be it a man of woman is the most important aspect of choosing a leader in an organisation.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response directly discusses both positions and maintains a clear opinion that competence and experience should determine leadership, with relevant public examples supporting women’s suitability. The principal weakness is presentation as one uninterrupted paragraph, compounded by limited explanation of the assumptions behind the first view and frequent language errors. The highest priority is to divide the argument into purposeful paragraphs and develop each claim with less generalisation and greater precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer’s competence-based opinion is clear, although some supporting claims are generalised or only briefly explained.
Develop the reasoning behind each view more critically instead of relying on broad claims about gender.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of introduction, opposing views, examples, and conclusion is discernible, but the entire response is presented as one paragraph.
Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with one controlling idea developed in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate topic vocabulary, but inaccurate choices and collocations such as “use ratio” and “based on genders” reduce precision.
Use natural leadership-related collocations and check noun forms, number, and prepositions when expressing abstract ideas.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence forms, but article, agreement, possessive, comparison, and clause errors occur regularly without usually obscuring meaning.
Proofread systematically for articles and noun agreement, and ensure every complex clause has a complete grammatical structure.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
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