Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Sample Response
The world is changinggetting change. It is irrefutable that technology makes a huge contribution to happen this. Working remotely or the environment of education are only a few examples of these changes. However, we are adapting to these changestry to get used to these changes these days. In my opinion, there are several benefits and drawbacksdrawbacks and benefits, also. First of all, in terms of education has some drawbacks. The youngerlast generation is observed as computer-tending individuals. They like to waste their timelike a waste of their time surfing on social media, chatting, or playing gamesplaying a game, so computer-based education can easily distract themease up distracts them. Education means not only learning some subjects but also improving social skillsyour social life skills such as communication skills, teamworkteam works, or social normsdo's&don't's rule. In-person educationPhysically education is more effective for developingmore effective to obtain these skills. In addition to this, there is no substitute for a teachernothing to replace with a teacher for a successful educational experienceeducation life. Teacher and class-based education should be the main approachtask and it can be combined with online sessions, additional courses, or exercisesonline sessions additional courses or exercises. However, working from home hashave some benefits for employees and employersemployee and employer. It saves money and time, so it can be suggested for possible work-field. For example, some people commute from far away places, which means that employees have to spend extra time to arrive at their job and extra money for travel. Besides this, people consume water, electricity by working offices, this makes benefits for the employer. Furthermore, employers can hire more qualified employees around the world thanks to working at home. ın terms of the worker, they catch a chance to living wherever they want, maybe it decreases in some places' density because of the job opportunity. In, worldwide computer spreading has some advantages and disadvantages. From the point of view of adults, it is beneficial for saving money and time. While, for the youth, it would be better traditional education mixed with new technologic facilities.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response gives a clear comparative view, with relevant reasons why home working can benefit adults and why home study may disadvantage children. Its main limitation is uneven language control, which makes several otherwise useful ideas awkward or imprecise, while some claims remain briefly explained. The highest priority is to express each main point in accurate sentences and develop it with a specific consequence or example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both home working and home study, maintains a discernible position, and supports most points with relevant reasons.
Develop the weaker claims, especially those about social skills and population density, by explaining a precise cause-and-effect link.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a broadly logical sequence, but the single-block presentation and sometimes mechanical connectors weaken the organization.
Separate the introduction, education discussion, work discussion, and conclusion into clear paragraphs with smoother transitions between ideas.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss technology, education, employment, and costs, although frequent word-choice and collocation problems reduce precision.
Replace awkward phrases with natural combinations such as remote work, distract students, physical classrooms, and employment opportunities.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, word forms, and clause construction repeatedly disrupt fluency.
Prioritize complete clause structures and subject-verb agreement, then proofread each sentence for articles and correct verb forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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