In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. what do you think are the cause of this? What do your solutions can you suggest?
Sample Response
Newspaper and television are a good source of information but nowadays, the trend of reading and watching news go on the downward direction between youngsters in various nations. There are various reasons behind it and, some possible solutions are there which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost reason is a hectic schedule. Today everyone is busy in their work and they do not have enough time which they spend on the news. Secondly, certain adults found that newspaper or television news is not interesting because printing media provide one day older news rather than electronic media. In other words, due to the advancement of technology, Juveline gets news on the same day and same time when it happens. This lack of interest and old fashion way to present is the main reasons. Why young ones do not read more news.
There is some possible and easy solution which make interest among adults to read and watch the news. First of all, the news is based on facts. The news which is published and broadcast they should be realistic and attractive. For instance, In newspaper use some graphic to present news, bold headlines to attract readers and avoid fake news. Moreover, news editor promotes their news through social media because now everyone is social active so with the help of this they can easily keep in touch with daily news.
To conclude, the traditional method is the main cause of why people do not have more interest in the news but if their news is present in the effective and attractive way then it will definitely attract the young ones.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix number agreement Original: Newspaper and television are a good source Suggested revision: Newspapers and television are good sources Why it matters: The compound plural subject requires a plural complement, and newspapers is used generically in the plural.
- 2. Use precise noun phrase Original: the trend of reading and watching news Suggested revision: the rate of reading and watching the news Why it matters: Rate describes the declining frequency more precisely, and news requires the definite article here.
- 3. Use correct verb form Original: go on the downward direction Suggested revision: is declining Why it matters: The original verb phrase is ungrammatical and unnecessarily wordy.
- 4. Use correct preposition Original: between youngsters Suggested revision: among young people Why it matters: Among is appropriate for a group, and young people is more suitable academic wording.
- 5. Fix clause order Original: some possible solutions are there which I will elaborate Suggested revision: I will outline some possible solutions Why it matters: The revision removes the unnatural existential structure and uses a verb that fits solutions.
- 6. Add required article Original: First and foremost reason Suggested revision: The first and foremost reason Why it matters: The superlative-style phrase requires the definite article.
- 7. Fix preposition Original: in Suggested revision: with Why it matters: Busy with is the correct collocation for an activity or responsibility.
- 8. Fix relative structure Original: time which they spend on the news Suggested revision: time to follow the news Why it matters: The infinitive correctly expresses the activity for which they lack time.
- 9. Use present tense Original: certain adults found Suggested revision: certain young adults find Why it matters: The general present-time claim requires find, and young keeps the subject aligned with the essay topic.
- 10. Use natural phrasing Original: newspaper or television news Suggested revision: news in newspapers or on television Why it matters: The prepositional phrases express the two news media more naturally.
- 11. Use correct term Original: printing Suggested revision: print Why it matters: Print media is the standard term for newspapers and similar publications.
- 12. Fix age expression Original: provide one day older news Suggested revision: provide news that is a day old Why it matters: The revision uses the correct structure for describing the age of the news.
Suggested Rewrites
- Newspaper and television are a good source Newspapers and television are good sources
- the trend of reading and watching news the rate of reading and watching the news
- go on the downward direction is declining
- between youngsters among young people
- some possible solutions are there which I will elaborate I will outline some possible solutions
- First and foremost reason The first and foremost reason
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable causes-and-solutions structure and maintains focus on young people's declining use of newspapers and television. However, the explanations are sometimes confused, the proposed solutions are only partly developed, and frequent language errors make several sentences awkward. Focus first on building a clear cause-to-effect chain and matching each cause with a specific, fully explained solution.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both causes and solutions are presented, but their relevance and development are uneven, with some reasoning becoming unclear or contradictory.
Explain how each cause reduces newspaper or television use and provide a directly matched solution with a realistic outcome.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing separates the required parts and the overall sequence is apparent, but fragments and mechanical linking disrupt local progression.
Give each body paragraph one controlling idea and connect supporting sentences through clear logical relationships rather than stock linkers.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to discuss the topic, but spelling errors and frequent inaccurate word combinations restrict precision.
Learn and use accurate topic phrases such as print media, up-to-date reporting, engaging presentation, and active on social media.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex sentences are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and clause construction often reduce clarity.
Practise writing complete subject-verb sentences and check plural agreement and passive forms systematically.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. what do you think are the cause of this? What do your solutions can you suggest?
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