The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.
Sample Response
The process chart illustrates coffee productionillustrates the coffee production and shows how the powderand how the powder is prepared for salesales in supermarkets and shops.
Overall, the process includes eleven steps beginning with the collection of coffee beans by farmers and culminating in the coffee powder being packed into jarsculminating in packing coffee powder into jars Deleteand finally being sent to the market for sale.
To begin with, the coffee beans are picked by farmersthe coffee beans are collected by the farmers and are allowed to dry under the sun Deletefor several days. The beans are then kept in a vacuum to make them into a roasted form, and it is allowed to cool rapidly. After coolingFollowing the cooling process, the beans are ground in a machine. The ground coffeeThe resulting powder is mixed with hot water, and the resulting mixturethe mixture thus obtained is strainedstrained by a strainer.
In the final stages of the coffee production process, the mixture is frozenis kept in a freezer. The frozen mixture undergoes a grinding process further to form a liquid. NextMoreover, the ground mixture is dried in a vacuumit is placed in a vacuum to remove water from the mixturethe remaining water in the powder. The coffee powder thus obtained is packed into jars and is made available to sell in the market got the customers.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is strongest in its complete, chronological coverage of the production sequence and its clear overview from bean picking to packaging. The main limitation is factual precision: roasting is incorrectly described as occurring in a vacuum, and grinding the frozen liquid is misrepresented as forming a liquid. Prioritise checking the purpose and result of each illustrated stage while retaining the effective step-by-step organisation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All major stages are included with a clear beginning and end, but the roasting and second grinding stages are described inaccurately.
Match each process verb and resulting material precisely to the diagram, especially roast the beans and grind the frozen liquid.
Coherence and Cohesion
The stages are arranged in a clear chronological sequence with effective paragraphing and generally smooth progression.
Replace additive linking such as Moreover with sequence-focused transitions where the process simply moves to the next stage.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of process vocabulary, though several awkward or imprecise collocations reduce accuracy.
Refine phrases such as prepared for sale, roasted, and ground into granules, and proofread the final sentence for word-choice errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of passive and complex structures is used successfully, but pronoun reference and wording errors recur in several sentences.
Keep passive subjects consistent and revise malformed endings, particularly the final clause about sale to customers.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.
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