Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter: - explain who you are and why you are writing - request these documents - ask whether you need to pay any fee for that

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Julia Scarlet from the United Kingdom. I am writing to you to requestrequests copies of my reports and assignmentsassignment that I submitted to the course coordinator to complete a presentation skill course I undertook at the Sydney College of Australia. I hopeI am hoping you would arrange to send me those copies as I need them urgently. I completed the course on 1818th March 2019 under the supervision of Mr Alfred and had copies of my reportsmy copy of reports, certificate and assignment. I submitted these documentsI submitted those to my previous employer LVL Group'LVL Group' and have recently taken a jobrecently took a job with another company. The new company has asked me to forward these papers and this is why I need these documents urgently. I had email correspondencecorrespondences with Mr Alfred, my course coordinator, and he suggested that I should contact you to request the documentsfor those papers. I would request you to sendforward these documents to my address as soon as possible. Kindly inform me If there is a feeif there is any charge for replacement copiesthe second copy of these documents. If there is any, I would be ready to pay itpay for that. I would really appreciate your cooperation and kind response. Yours faithfully, Julia Scarlet

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter fully achieves its request: it identifies the writer and course, explains why the records are urgent, asks for the documents, and checks the fee in an appropriately formal tone. The information is easy to follow, but repetition, an unbroken paragraph, and several faulty forms reduce polish; prioritise paragraphing the background, request and payment query, then correct phrases such as to requests, copies of my reports and assignments, and email correspondence.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

All three requirements are fully developed with relevant identifying details, a clear urgent reason, a direct document request and an explicit fee enquiry.

Next step

Clarify whether the previous employer holds the originals or copies so that the requested replacement documents are entirely unambiguous.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The explanation progresses logically from identification to the employment context, request and fee question, but repetition and absent paragraphing weaken the structure.

Next step

Create distinct paragraphs for course details, the reason for urgency, the document request and the payment enquiry.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is sufficiently varied and formal for the request, though repeated references to documents and several unnatural forms limit precision.

Next step

Use concise terms such as copies, records and replacements, and correct email correspondences to email correspondence.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

The letter uses a good range of complex structures with generally clear control, despite several verb-form, number and noun-phrase errors.

Next step

Proofread forms such as writing to request, reports and assignments, copies of the reports, and willing to pay the fee.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter:

- explain who you are and why you are writing

- request these documents

- ask whether you need to pay any fee for that

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