Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Some feel that since it is challenging for children to learn a foreign language, schools should not make this subject a priorityemphasize this subject area. In my opinion, the challenge is the very reasonthe entire justification for supporting second language education.
Critics argue that the majority of children are simply incapable of learning an additional language. The best evidence for this is anecdotal and relates to the growing workloadincreasingly large burden of work placed on young children. Schools in many parts of the world, particularly in high-achieving nations such as South Korea and Japan, have long school daysare in session for many hours and students learn an array of subjects. They are usually taught English, the world’s lingua franca, and this is especially difficult for speakers of Asian languages, which share little linguistic history with Englishwhere there is little shared linguistic history. The end result is often that students waste time and may feel discouraged and experience low self-esteemmay feel discouraged and lack self-esteem.
However, children can learn languages better than adults and the challenge this presentsthe challenge presented is itself an important lesson. If schools investIf the schools have invested in proper training and use engaging materials then the lessons will not be boring and there is a stronger likelihood of success. Research has shown that language learning is most effective before the age of 7, with pronunciation becoming a stumbling block for older learners who already have established pronunciation habitsfixed vocal formations. Moreover, the difficulty of learning a language encourages children to work harder and develop their learning skillsexpand their ability to learn in creative ways. This applies to all subjects but languages stand out as students must seek novel memorization techniques and view the world from a completely different perspective.
In conclusion, despite the low success rateslow rates of success in many cases, the impact of attempting to learn a language is itself tremendously beneficial. Schools should therefore continue funding this part of the curriculum.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The essay is persuasive and well organised, sustaining a clear position while considering the opposing view and developing its own case with specific reasoning. Its main limitation is that a few assertions about inability and success rates are broader than their support, and some sophisticated phrases sound slightly forced. Prioritise tighter qualification of those claims and more natural precision in the occasional awkward expression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The question is fully addressed through a clear position, a considered counterargument, and well-developed supporting reasons.
Qualify broad claims about children's ability and success rates with more precise reasoning or evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and progression are highly effective, with ideas sequenced logically and cohesive devices used unobtrusively.
Make the transition from rebutting practical difficulty to explaining its educational value even more direct.
Lexical Resource
A wide and flexible vocabulary conveys complex ideas precisely, with only occasional slightly forced wording.
Replace expressions such as fixed vocal formations with more natural, discipline-appropriate phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex sentence forms is handled accurately, and errors are rare and do not impede communication.
Polish tense and article choices in hypothetical sentences to make already strong grammatical control more consistent.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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