Environmental problems are becoming a global issue, and therefore, some people suggest that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Some environmental problems are regional, like cyclones; and some others are global, greenhouse effects, for instance. Over timeWith the span of time, many environmental problems are becoming global issues. Some people thus advocate for global initiatives to tackle those environmental issues. I agree with this view as I believe that global initiatives will bring the best resultsresult in this contextscenario, and theyit will also make the world a better place to live in.
To begin with, environmental problems are generally caused by human activities and most of them are global concerns. Air or water pollution at a time remains a national problem but after a certain period, it would turn into a problem for the whole world. Thus, ifThus if some environmental problems are left unaddressed because they occur within one countrydue to their span in a country, they would soon become a problem for all nations. This is why those problems should be addressed globally.
Moreover, not all nations are equally capable of addressingequally competent to address issues of such magnitude because of economic and political constraintsdue to their economic and political reasons. This is why affluent nations should offer helpextend their helping hands to solve environmental problems in poorer nationssuch poor nations. There is no denying that industrial nations contribute more to global warmingcause more global warming. Therefore, they need to buildSo they need to build a common platform to bring all nations together to fight environmental problems. For a poor country, it is difficultit is quite tough to allocate a budget to tackle environmental issues while millions of its peoplepopulation are suffering from hunger and natural disasters. This is why rich nations have an obligationnatural obligations to help those poor or developing nations.
To draw the conclusion, global environmental problems like the greenhouse effectlike greenhouse effects, global warming etc. have already become a concern for every nation. A global effort to address these problems would be a better strategy as not every nation is equally adepteach nation is not equally adept at solving global problems.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay maintains a clear position and develops two relevant reasons for international action, especially the unequal capacity of rich and poor countries. Its main weakness is imprecise reasoning and wording in places, including broad claims about local pollution inevitably becoming global and several awkward collocations. The response would improve most by supporting each causal claim with a concrete example and expressing it in more exact academic language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question, sustains agreement, and develops relevant arguments about cross-border effects and unequal national resources.
Make the first argument more convincing by explaining a specific mechanism through which a national environmental problem becomes international.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure is logical and the argument progresses clearly, though some linking phrases are repeated mechanically.
Use more varied referencing and transitions instead of repeatedly relying on 'This is why'.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but recurrent collocational inaccuracies such as 'with the span of time' and 'natural obligations' reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate collocations when discussing responsibility, capacity, and environmental impacts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses a good range of complex sentences with mostly clear and accurate control despite occasional agreement and conditional-form slips.
Check agreement and tense consistency in hypothetical statements and sentences with collective or quantified subjects.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Environmental problems are becoming a global issue, and therefore, some people suggest that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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