The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.
Sample Response
The pie chartschart depicts local governmentindigenous authority expendituremoney utilization inbetween 2010 and 2015 on different spending categoriesdiverse kinds of facilities.
In 2010, the largest share of expenditure2010 maximum expenditure was incurred on the educationstudy system which remained at its peakon peek in 2015, even though it decreased by 3 percent compared to 2010. At the same time, money spent on welfare increased by 5 percentage pointswas inclined by 4 percent over the five-year periodwithin half a decade. Spending on defence and healthcare decreasedMoney expended on Defense and healthcare was decreased by 3 percent and 1 percent, respectively.
Furthermore, moneyMoney spent on interest on borrowingutilized on Interest on borrowing increased by 5 percent in 2015. At the same time money spent on transport and culture and leisuretransportation and Culture and leisure activities declined by 2 and 1 percentage points, respectivelywas declined by 2 percent and 1 percent respectively. On the other hand, the ratio of money utilized on pensions and others observed remain the same.
Overall the largest falls occurredmaximum fall was noticed in the ratio of education and Defense. In comparison, the maximum increased ratio was seen on the rate of interest.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response covers all expenditure categories and identifies several important changes, with a recognisable overview and generally clear paragraphing. Its main weakness is inaccurate and imprecise reporting, particularly the welfare increase and the incomplete account of the joint largest rise. The highest-priority improvement is to verify every change against both charts and express comparisons with conventional statistical language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most categories and changes are reported, but welfare rose by five rather than four percentage points and shared the largest increase with borrowing interest.
Check each value carefully and make the overview accurately identify both the joint largest increases and decreases.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a broadly logical introduction-detail-overview structure, although linking is mechanical and the overview would be more effective earlier.
Place a concise overview after the introduction and group categories by increases, decreases, and unchanged shares.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe the data, but frequent unsuitable choices such as indigenous authority, study system, and inclined reduce precision.
Use standard chart language, including local government, education, rose, fell, and percentage points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable, but frequent errors in passive forms, agreement, articles, and capitalisation limit grammatical control.
Use accurate active comparison structures such as spending on welfare rose from 8% to 13%.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.
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