The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
Sample Response
The pie chart illustrates how the UAE government spent itstheir budget of AED 315 billionBillion in 2000. Overall it is immediately apparent from the pie chartfrom the graph that the government allocated the largest amount topaid the highest amount on social security, and the smallest amount was spent on transportthe least amount was on transport.
To begin with, in the year 2000, the second-largest allocationsecond largest amount was spent on health and personal social services; however, it was just over half the AED 100 billion allocated to social security (AED 53 billion)almost half of the expense of social security( AED53 billion). After that, education received the third-largest allocationwas given more priority by the government. SpecificallyTherefore, the government spentit also spent AED 38 billion.
To continue, the remaining categories receivedthe remaining sectors used less than AED 25 billionBillion. More specificallyAs an explanation, defencethe defence, debt interest and other expenditures were approximately the same. Similarly, law and orderHowever, low order, housing, heritage and environmenthousing heritage and environment, as well as industry, agriculture and employmentindustrial agriculture and employment, formed a descending sequence in AED 2 billion stepstake AED 2 billion difference only.
As a comparison, it can be seen that the UAE administration allocated AED 100 billion in social security. However, this single sector accounted forcosts the UAE government one-third of the total budget.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its accurate identification of the largest and smallest allocations, supported by several relevant figures and comparisons. Its main limitation is that the discussion of the smaller sectors becomes imprecise and awkwardly grouped, while language errors sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Prioritise clearer grouping of related categories and state each comparison with an exact, accurately labelled figure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately reports the main allocations, including social security, transport, health, and education.
Clarify the grouping of the smaller sectors and support those comparisons with their exact figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is divided into logical stages, but mechanical linkers and the delayed return to social security weaken the progression.
Group the largest allocations together before moving once to the smaller categories, using fewer formulaic linking phrases.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient for describing expenditure, although several inaccurate collocations and labels reduce precision.
Use exact category names and natural phrases such as 'allocated to' and 'accounted for' when reporting spending.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the main points, but agreement, tense, article, and punctuation errors recur.
Proofread verb forms and sentence boundaries, especially when comparing several categories in one sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion.
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