You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for three months over the summer. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: - say what experience you have? - ask what the work involves? - enquire about work conditions?
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in response towriting this letter with reference to your job advertisementjob posting advert in the local newspaper which was published yesterday. It states thatIt contains information that a part-time role is available for three monthsa few months during the summer. I believe thatI feel obliged that I would be a suitable candidatechoice to take up this opportunity, and I would strive to provideI ensure to provide my utmost support in fulfilling your expectations.
Firstly, let me provide some insights from my previous experience. I workedI had worked as an assistant waiter in a Chinese restaurant located downtownlocated in the downtown area for more than a year. I used to attend collegeattend my college until the afternoontill afternoon and work in the evenings until midnightfrom evenings till midnight.
Although the newspaper clipping contains the duration of the employment, I would like to know more about the type of work and my contribution to the functioning of the hotel not only as an individual but also as a team.
Furthermore, I would like to enquire regarding the timings of my shift and salary which is paid on either hourly or daily basis. Additionally, please let me know the start dateplease help me with the date of joining so I can make the necessary arrangementsso I can be prepared to start as early as possible.
Thank you for your consideration, and I hope to hearand hope to hear from you soon.
Yours faithfully, AnkithaYours faithfully,
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is well organised, uses a suitable formal tone, and covers the applicant’s experience, likely duties, and key employment conditions. Its main limitation is a pattern of awkward collocations and grammatical slips that makes several sentences less natural despite the clear message. The highest priority is to express qualifications and questions more directly, using accurate tense, articles, and standard job-application phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter fulfils its purpose and addresses all three bullet points with relevant experience and questions about duties, hours, pay, and the start date.
Make the question about the role more specific by asking which duties and responsibilities the successful applicant would handle.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear progression from application purpose to experience, duties, and conditions, with effective paragraphing throughout.
Reduce reliance on signposting words and connect closely related questions more naturally within each paragraph.
Lexical Resource
There is a sufficient range of formal employment vocabulary, but awkward choices such as “I feel obliged,” “timings,” and “enquire regarding” weaken naturalness and precision.
Use standard application phrases such as “I believe I am suitable,” “working hours,” and “enquire about.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of complex and simple structures conveys the message clearly, although tense, article, and clause errors occur with noticeable regularity.
Correct forms such as “I worked,” “in the evenings,” “on an hourly basis,” and “I hope to hear from you.”
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for three months over the summer. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter:
- say what experience you have?
- ask what the work involves?
- enquire about work conditions?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.