As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.
Sample Response
Some people believe the role of teachers has started to fadestarted to fade because computers have helped some students progresshave been helping some students to progress in their studies more quicklyquicker than they do in a traditional classroomcompared to studies in an original classroom. For example, within a single classroomin the same classroom, students have different intellectual capacities; thuscapacities, thus some would be limited to slower progressbe tied to a slow advance in their studies because of other students’ difficulty in understandingothers’ incapability of understanding. In this way, pupils could acquire knowledgeprogress in their acquisition of knowledge at their own pace using computers instead of learning from teachers.
However, the presence of a teacher is essential for students because human contactthe human contact influences them positivelyin positive ways. Firstly, students realize that they are not dealing with a machine but with a human being who deserves attention and respect. They also learn the importance of studying in a group and respecting other studentsstudying in a group and respect for other students, which helps them improve their social skills.
Moreover, teachers are required in the learning process because they identify some students’ difficultiesacknowledge some students’ deficiencies and help them to solve their problems by explaining the material againby repeating the same explanation, giving extra exercises or even suggesting a private tutor. Hence, students can have a better chance of avoiding failure in a subjectavoiding a failure in a subject.
In conclusion, the role offor teachers in the learning process is still very important and it will remain socontinue to be such in the future because no machine can replace the human interaction and its consequences.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear position and supports it with logically separated reasons about social development and individual learning needs. Its main limitation is that it falls slightly below the expected length and some supporting points remain fairly general. The highest-priority improvement is to extend one or two arguments with more specific explanation while maintaining the essay's direct focus.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained and supported with relevant reasons, although development is somewhat limited by the short response.
Develop the strongest supporting point with a more specific consequence or example and meet the minimum length.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through well-focused paragraphs, with cohesive devices used clearly and appropriately.
Make the transition from the computer-learning benefit to the opposing position slightly more explicit.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though a few collocations such as 'original classroom' sound unnatural.
Use more natural academic collocations when describing conventional teaching and student difficulties.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is used with generally accurate control and clear meaning.
Refine article use and comparative phrasing to remove occasional awkward constructions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.
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