Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Whether natural aptitude should determine the kind of work both men and women should do or they are capable of doing the same type of work is somewhat controversial and require thorough discussion. This essay will explain both aspects. However, I believe that both genders are qualified to take the same challenge and are capable of doing similar jobs. From one perspective, women are generally considered physically weaker than men and hence less suitable for jobs that require ferocity and physical power. Men, on the other hand, are meant to provide and protect their wives and the entire family and earn the living. Secondly, the caring nature and tender heart that women possess make them more capable of certain careers. This means they generally perform better in occupations that require patience, caring and kind heart such as nursing, social works and teaching. From the opposite perspective, modern society does not discriminate against genders and offer any type of work to both male and female due to its fairness and advancements. Women and men who go to the same university and take the same training programmes are equally prepared to take a job. Again, the traditional idea that women will take care of their children while men will earn the living is changing and a reverse scenario could be seen in many families. Finally, women, in almost all fields, have already proved that they can perform as good as men if they are given the opportunity. So there is no way we can undermine their capability. In conclusion, although being naturally endowed may be beneficial for both genders in some situations, it is not particularly needed at workplaces. Learning and training are indispensable for men and women in any society to work for the same jobs.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct the collocation Original: take the same challenge Suggested revision: meet the same challenges Why it matters: English normally uses meet or face a challenge rather than take a challenge.
- 2. Choose accurate terms Original: ferocity and physical power Suggested revision: physical force and strength Why it matters: Ferocity describes savagery and is not an appropriate general term for job requirements.
- 3. Correct the article Original: the Suggested revision: a Why it matters: The fixed expression is earn a living rather than earn the living.
- 4. Use parallel nouns Original: patience, caring and kind heart Suggested revision: patience, care, and kindness Why it matters: Three parallel nouns make the list grammatically consistent.
- 5. Use uncountable noun Original: works Suggested revision: work Why it matters: Social work is the uncountable name of the profession.
- 6. Fix agreement and phrase Original: modern society does not discriminate against genders and offer Suggested revision: modern society does not discriminate by gender and offers Why it matters: The revision uses the natural prepositional phrase and makes the coordinated verb agree with society.
- 7. Use precise wording Original: take Suggested revision: do Why it matters: Do a job fits the claim about being prepared to perform work more accurately.
- 8. Use adverbial comparison Original: good Suggested revision: well Why it matters: The verb perform must be modified by the adverb well rather than the adjective good.
- 9. Use natural expression Original: at workplaces Suggested revision: in the workplace Why it matters: In the workplace is the standard general expression for employment settings.
- 10. Correct the collocation Original: work for the same jobs Suggested revision: do the same jobs Why it matters: People do jobs or work in roles; they do not work for jobs.
- 11. Use balanced phrasing Original: both genders are qualified Suggested revision: men and women are equally qualified Why it matters: The revision states the comparison between the two groups more explicitly.
- 12. Use concise wording Original: the caring nature and tender heart that women possess Suggested revision: women's caring nature and tenderness Why it matters: The possessive structure is more concise and replaces the awkward phrase tender heart.
Suggested Rewrites
- take the same challenge meet the same challenges
- ferocity and physical power physical force and strength
- the a
- patience, caring and kind heart patience, care, and kindness
- works work
- modern society does not discriminate against genders and offer modern society does not discriminate by gender and offers
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response clearly discusses both views and maintains a definite opinion, with relevant reasons about physical differences, caring roles, training, and changing family patterns. Its main limitation is presentation: the entire discussion forms one block, while several awkward collocations and grammatical slips reduce precision. The priority is to divide the argument into purposeful paragraphs and refine inaccurate expressions so each perspective is easier to follow.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both perspectives are addressed and the writer's opinion is clear throughout, although some claims rely on broad generalisations rather than detailed support.
Support each view with a concrete example and qualify sweeping claims about gender roles and natural abilities.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a clear internal sequence and useful signposting, but the absence of paragraph breaks weakens organisation and readability.
Use separate introduction, viewpoint, counter-viewpoint, and conclusion paragraphs, each centred on one controlling idea.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of topic vocabulary, though several choices and collocations are awkward or inaccurate.
Replace imprecise phrases such as take the same challenge and work for the same jobs with natural, exact alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex sentences and generally communicates clearly, despite recurring errors in agreement, articles, and comparative forms.
Proofread systematically for subject-verb agreement, countable nouns, articles, and forms such as as well as.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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