Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Whether men and women have equal capacity to do any job or the type of work they do should be based on their natural features and inherent abilities is a widely debated issue. While some believe that both genders have an equal aptitude to do any sort of work, others, however, deny it. This essay delves into the issue and then draw a sensible conclusion. A group of people opine that men and women are not physically much different. Apart from that, men and women possess the same natural abilities, thinking patterns, emotions, needs and instincts. Since women are kept mostly inside houses, they react differently than men in different situations. If both men and women are given equal opportunity and experience, they can both handle any job with the same efficiency. Thus, this group of people deny that any particular gender is better prepared for a job than the opposite gender. For example, they say that in the past, women were deprived of education, job and other social activities, and because of that, the number of women in higher corporate positions was fewer than that of today's number. Another group, however, remains strict to the fact that men and women have different physical and mental capacities and these capacities make them more suitable for different types of professions. For instance, a woman is a natural caregiver and hence nursing is a more suitable profession for her. On the contrary construction works, one example of such many professions is suitable for men. In conclusion, tasks for men and women are determined mostly by their natural abilities and this is a natural law. Denying it would not be a good idea and in my opinion, no task is less important and thus distinctive professions makes them perform better.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use precise human trait Original: natural features Suggested revision: physical characteristics Why it matters: 'Physical characteristics' precisely identifies inherent bodily traits.
- 2. Remove redundant contrast Original: others, however, deny it Suggested revision: others disagree Why it matters: 'While' already establishes the contrast, and 'disagree' states the response directly.
- 3. Fix verb agreement Original: draw Suggested revision: draws Why it matters: The singular subject 'This essay' requires 'draws'.
- 4. Use natural reporting verb Original: opine Suggested revision: argue Why it matters: 'Argue' is the natural academic reporting verb in this context.
- 5. Place adverb naturally Original: not physically much different Suggested revision: not very different physically Why it matters: The revised adverb order is natural and clear.
- 6. Use additive connector Original: Apart from that Suggested revision: Furthermore Why it matters: The sentence adds supporting information rather than introducing an exception.
- 7. Use concise confinement phrase Original: kept mostly inside houses Suggested revision: largely confined to the home Why it matters: The revision expresses the intended restriction in formal English.
- 8. Use comparison preposition Original: than Suggested revision: from Why it matters: 'Different from' is the standard comparative construction.
- 9. Avoid repeated adjective Original: different Suggested revision: various Why it matters: The revision avoids repeating 'different' in the same sentence.
- 10. Use plural opportunity Original: opportunity Suggested revision: opportunities Why it matters: The general reference to multiple forms of access requires the plural noun.
- 11. Fix collective agreement Original: this group of people deny Suggested revision: this group denies Why it matters: The head noun 'group' is singular and takes 'denies'.
- 12. Use neutral comparison term Original: opposite Suggested revision: other Why it matters: 'Other gender' is the natural term when contrasting the two groups in the essay.
Suggested Rewrites
- natural features physical characteristics
- others, however, deny it others disagree
- draw draws
- opine argue
- not physically much different not very different physically
- Apart from that Furthermore
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response considers both perspectives and eventually states a preference for work aligned with perceived natural abilities. Its main limitation is uneven and stereotyped development: broad claims about women as caregivers and men in construction are not critically supported, while the final position is awkwardly expressed. Prioritise developing evidence-based examples and stating a precise, defensible opinion from the introduction onward.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
Both views are addressed and an opinion appears in the conclusion, but support is uneven, generalised, and sometimes based on unsupported gender stereotypes.
State the position in the introduction and support it with nuanced examples showing how individual ability, training, and job requirements interact.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a basic sequence from one view to the other and then the conclusion, but the single-paragraph format weakens organisation.
Create distinct introduction, two-view, opinion, and conclusion paragraphs with explicit central ideas and logical links.
Lexical Resource
The response has adequate vocabulary for ability and employment, though frequent inaccurate collocations and repetitive gender references limit precision.
Replace phrases such as “remain strict to the fact” and “construction works” with “maintain that” and “construction work.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are mixed, but frequent agreement, article, punctuation, and clause-structure errors sometimes make meaning difficult to follow.
Focus on complete sentence structures and agreement, especially in the construction example and the final opinion sentence.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.