In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples
Sample Response
In the twenty-first century, we are constantly confronted with the issue of 'responsible tourism' which is a current trend in front of the tourism that focuses mainly on the traditions and environment on newspaper. Some people, nevertheless, are if the opinion that it is nearly impossible to be implemented in this modern world. This essay will examine both sides of the argument before reaching a reasonable conclusion.
Admittedly, 'responsible tourism' is difficult to be promoted in every country around the globe. It is, possibly, due to the reason that tourists come from everywhere of the world and some of them may not be well-educated which cause them to behave badly when they visit a new country. For example, I have seen some foreign tourists who visited my country do not take care of the Mother Nature and they plucked flowers along the way to a museum. By doing so, their naive acts can destroy the beautiful scenery of a specific tourist spot.
However, I am not convinced by others that the 'responsible tourism' can never possible to be implemented owing to several reasons. To begin, tour guides have the obligations to advise or give information to the tourists about the local culture. It is the key for the tourists, especially those from overseas to respect the cultures and traditions of the locals. It is also given them an opportunity to know about the cultures of other countries so as to broaden their views. It is crucial for individual to learn the cultures of other races around the world in order to avoid culture shock and be more open-minded. In addition, government, undoubtedly, plays an indispensable role in ensuring the 'responsible tourism' runs smoothly. They can, for instance, to organise more campaigns with the aim to promote the local culture and environment to both the local and foreign tourists. More noticeable should be placed in every corner of the tourist attractions to encourage the tourists to keep the place clean as it is the most effective and direct way to take care of the environment.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that 'responsible tourism' is impossible to implement as they are a handful of useful preventive measures that the individuals and government can take to promote this kind of tourism without causing any harm to the local cultures and environment.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Clarify the trend Original: a current trend in front of the tourism Suggested revision: a current trend in tourism Why it matters: The original phrase is non-idiomatic and obscures the field in which the trend occurs.
- 2. Correct publication phrase Original: environment on newspaper Suggested revision: environment in newspaper reports Why it matters: Information appears 'in' newspapers, and the plural phrase is natural here.
- 3. Correct the preposition Original: if Suggested revision: of Why it matters: The fixed expression is 'be of the opinion'.
- 4. Use active infinitive Original: impossible to be implemented Suggested revision: impossible to implement Why it matters: The active infinitive is the correct concise structure after 'impossible'.
- 5. Use active infinitive Original: difficult to be promoted Suggested revision: difficult to promote Why it matters: The active infinitive is natural when discussing implementation generally.
- 6. Use concise cause phrase Original: It is, possibly, due to the reason that Suggested revision: This may be because Why it matters: The shorter clause states the possible cause directly.
- 7. Correct location phrase Original: everywhere of the world Suggested revision: all over the world Why it matters: The fixed expression for worldwide origin is 'all over the world'.
- 8. Correct clause agreement Original: some of them may not be well-educated which cause them Suggested revision: some may lack awareness, which causes them Why it matters: The revised clause has a clear subject and a singular agreeing verb.
- 9. Align tense and wording Original: tourists who visited my country do not take care Suggested revision: tourists visiting my country do not respect Why it matters: The participle aligns the time reference, and 'respect' fits treatment of nature.
- 10. Remove unnecessary article Original: the Mother Nature Suggested revision: Mother Nature Why it matters: The personified proper name does not take 'the'.
- 11. Use accurate adjective Original: their naive acts Suggested revision: their careless actions Why it matters: 'Careless' describes harmful disregard more accurately than 'naive'.
- 12. Correct reporting phrase Original: not convinced by others that Suggested revision: not convinced by the claim that Why it matters: A person is convinced by a claim or argument, not by 'others that'.
Suggested Rewrites
- a current trend in front of the tourism a current trend in tourism
- environment on newspaper environment in newspaper reports
- if of
- impossible to be implemented impossible to implement
- difficult to be promoted difficult to promote
- It is, possibly, due to the reason that This may be because
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay sustains a clear disagreement and develops practical measures involving tour guides, public campaigns, and signs, while acknowledging why responsible behaviour is difficult to achieve universally. Its strongest feature is the solution-focused development, but frequent grammatical errors and unnatural vocabulary obscure some otherwise relevant reasoning. Prioritise precise explanation of how each proposed measure protects local culture or the environment, using controlled sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response clearly disagrees, acknowledges implementation difficulty, and supports its view with several relevant measures and an environmental example, though some cultural benefits are less directly tied to responsible behaviour.
Show explicitly how guide briefings, campaigns, and site notices change tourist conduct and protect both culture and nature.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, concession, main argument, and conclusion form a clear progression, with generally effective paragraphing despite occasional mechanical or inaccurate links.
Give each proposed measure its own clear claim-and-result sequence and reduce repetitive references to culture and environment.
Lexical Resource
The essay uses a reasonable range of tourism and environmental vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce naturalness.
Use forms such as 'promote responsible tourism,' 'visitors from around the world,' 'raise awareness,' and 'place more notices.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures is used and the position remains understandable, though verb forms, agreement, articles, pronouns, and clause construction contain frequent errors.
Edit each complex sentence for a complete verb pattern, especially after modal verbs, infinitives, relative clauses, and passive structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In the recent years, there is a trend of ‘responsible tourism’, which pays attention to both local culture and environment. However, there are still people who think that ‘responsible tourism’ is impossible to implement in reality. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples
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