Many employers think that social skills are as important as good qualifications for employing people. To what extent do you agree that social skills are as important as good qualifications for success in the job?
Sample Response
Regarding how social skills and qualifications contribute to a person's career successsuccess in the career, I think both factors are equally important.
Academic qualifications typically require years of study and sustained effortcannot be acquired without many years of study and continued practice, so they reflect a person's academic background and mastery of specialized knowledge and skills. Many employers require job applicants to possess a certain qualification levellevel of qualification, which is an important criterion for evaluatingcriterion to evaluate whether the applicant is qualified for the position Deleteor not. Therefore, a advanced academic qualificationhigh-level academic qualification awarded by a renowned universityobtained in a renowned university can offerbring a person more opportunities in the job marketthe/job market and a strong foundation for career successa good starting point in his or her path towards career success. In additionIn addition to this, people have also become increasingly aware of the importance of social skills in the workplace. Those with well-developed social skillssophisticated social skills can develop and maintain good relationships with colleagues. With mutual support and active interaction, employees tend to work more efficientlyhave higher efficiency and enjoy their working lives. This is particularly important in today's society, where employees often face complexcomplicated tasks that require close cooperation among different departments. Also, good social skills enable/people to establish wide connections at work and in life, directly associated with their performance in some occupations. For example, a sociable salespersonsalesman, even though he may not possess a very high level of qualificationvery high qualification, can sign more contracts than those who are not good at socializingSocializing with others.
Overall, there is no doubt that good academic qualifications are important in job seekingjob-hunting and personal development. However, since communicating and cooperating with others have become an essential part in the workplace, social skills should also be highly valued.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response is strongest in its clear balanced position and its relevant explanation of how qualifications and interpersonal abilities contribute to workplace success. Its main limitation is that both sides are compressed into one dense body paragraph, while several awkward collocations and transcription-like slips reduce polish; the highest-priority improvement is to separate the two arguments and refine expressions such as those concerning efficiency, connections, and qualifications.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear, and both qualifications and social skills are explained with relevant reasons and an example.
Develop the comparison more explicitly by explaining why the two factors deserve equal weight across different jobs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a logical sequence and uses a suitable range of linking expressions, despite dense paragraphing.
Give qualifications and social skills separate body paragraphs so that each main idea has a clearly defined focus.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of topic-specific vocabulary, although several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Revise combinations such as higher efficiency, wide connections, and high qualification into more natural professional English.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is used with generally good control, and errors rarely interfere with meaning.
Proofread articles, prepositions, capitalization, and stray slash marks, especially around qualification and workplace phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many employers think that social skills are as important as good qualifications for employing people. To what extent do you agree that social skills are as important as good qualifications for success in the job?
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