The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The provided bar chart presents specific information on the coffee and tea consumption habits ofregarding buying and drinking habits regarding coffee and tea among residents in five Australian cities.
Overall, a notable pattern that emerges is that the proportion of people visiting a cafethe value for going to a cafe for drinks consistently surpassed the other categories in four cities except for Adelaide. Furthermore, it is evident that buying fresh coffee wasis the least popular option for Australians.
A closer analysis of the data reveals that the figure for going to a cafe for drinks accounted for the largest proportionstood at the largest proportion in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart, at approximately 60%, 62%, 54% and 63% respectively. By contrast, Adelaide showed a different pattern: visiting a cafe ranked second at just under 40%. Meanwhile, half of them preferredperferred to buy instant coffee.
Notably, the percentage of people who bought fresh coffee is the lowest of the three categories. Also, it is true that regarding Brisban, Adelaide and Hobart there is a significant gap between residents' preferences foron fresh coffee and instant coffee. In these three cities, instant coffee purchases ranged between 50% and 54%, outstripping fresh coffee by roughly 15 to 20 percentage points. However, the differences in Sydney and Melbourne were relatively smallsmaller, at around 5%.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The report effectively captures all major trends and key data points with an insightful overview and logical data grouping. The response is clear and well-organized, though minor spelling slips and slight mechanical phrasing occasionally distract from the delivery. Proofreading key city names and eliminating small vocabulary typos will refine the response to an even higher standard.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends and regional differences across all five cities are clearly highlighted with accurate numerical support.
Ensure all specific data figures are cited precisely without relying heavily on round estimates when exact chart increments are clear.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into well-defined paragraphs using clear contrastive connectors.
Vary cohesive transitions slightly to avoid repetitive introductory linking phrases at the beginning of paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic-specific vocabulary and comparative expressions is used naturally throughout.
Eliminate minor spelling errors in key terms and properly copy city names directly from the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures show impressive variety and strong grammatical control with minimal error.
Maintain consistent tense usage when introducing passive structures and general observation clauses.