The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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Sample Response
The provided bar chartline graph presents specific information regarding buying and drinking habits regardingon coffee and tea among residentsin the residens in five Australian cities.
Overall, a notable pattern that emerges is that the value for going to a cafe for drinks consistently surpassed the other categories in four cities except for Adelaide. Furthermore, it is evident that buying fresh coffee is the least popular option for Australians.
A closer analysis of the data reveals that the figure for going to a cafe for drinks stood at the largest proportion in Sydney, Melbourne, BrisbaneSydney,Melbourne,Brisban and Hobart, at approximatelywith the roughly value of 60%, 62%, 54% and 63% respectively. While there is a significant difference in Adelaide, where nearly 40% of respondents visited a cafeopted to cafe ranked the second. Meanwhile, half of them preferredperferred to buy instant coffee.
In addition, notably,it is noteworthy to highlight that the percentage of people who bought fresh coffee is the lowest of thethe least over three categories. Also, it is true that regarding Brisban, Adelaide and Hobart there is a significant gap between residents' preferencesresidents preferences on fresh coffee and instant coffee. To elaborate, the mean value was calculated at approximately 50%, which is roughly 10 to 15 percentage points highernearly 10 percent larger than that of fresh coffee in these three cities. However, the differences in Sydney and Melbourne wereis relatively smallerless, within around 5%.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response successfully covers the key trends in the chart by providing a clear overview and highlighting major comparisons across the Australian cities. However, accuracy is slightly compromised by misidentifying the visual as a line graph rather than a bar chart, along with a few minor data misinterpretations. To improve, focus on precisely identifying graphic types, refining sentence structures, and eliminating spelling and punctuation errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the main trends and provides relevant data comparisons, though it mislabel's the chart type and contains minor numerical inaccuracies.
Ensure correct chart terminology and verify that specific percentage comparisons exactly match the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically with a clear overall progression, although some paragraph transitions and cohesive devices feel a bit mechanical.
Improve sentence linking by avoiding fragment structures introduced by subordinate conjunctions like 'while'.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, though noticeable spelling mistakes and repetitive phrasing occasionally appear.
Proofread carefully to fix spelling errors such as 'residens' or 'perferred' and use a wider variety of lexical structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is attempted with reasonable clarity, but frequent grammatical and punctuation errors are present.
Focus on subject-verb agreement and proper spacing around punctuation marks to increase accuracy across complex sentences.