The line graph below shows how much people in four countries spent on purchasing books from 1995 to 2005.
Sample Response
The line graphThe illustration compares the amount spent on purchasing books between 1995 and 2005 by the citizens of four countries. Generally speaking, Germans spent the highest amount on books during this period and Austrian citizens’ spending went higher than Italians after 2002. According to the line graph, Germans spent 80 million US dollarsdollar for buying books in 1995 which was significantly higher than the amount spent by other nationalities. That yearIn this year Italians and French people spentdisbursed 50 and 55 million respectively for the same purpose. AustriansAustrian people spent less than 30 million which was lesslower than half of the Germans spending for books. After 2 years, spending by those nationalities for purchasing books increased. In 1999, the expenditure by Germans for books reached 90 millionreached to 90 million while it was 60 and 50 million for French and Italian. Austrian spending on booksExpenses on books for Austrian remained the same as it was in 1995. However, after 2001, Austrian people started spending more on books and this amount exceeded the money spent by Italians in 2003, finally reaching to over 60 million in 2005. A similar amount was spent by French people in this year while Italian spending on booksItalians cost for books stood at 50 million. The biggest spender on bookshighest payer on books in 2005 was Germany, accounting for 95 millionaccounting 95 million, which was considerably higher than other nations’ spending on books.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The report gives a clear overview and accurately selects the main trends, especially Germany’s consistently highest spending and Austria’s sharp late rise. Its effectiveness is reduced by dense paragraphing and several unnatural reporting phrases, alongside recurring article, preposition, and plural errors. Prioritise grouping the countries into clearer comparison paragraphs while using standard expressions for expenditure and checking units and data phrasing carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report covers the main trends accurately: Germany remains highest, Austria rises sharply after 2001, France increases steadily, and Italy changes least. A few data choices could be more exact, but the visual information is well selected.
Add one clearer comparison of Austria's sharp rise with Italy's flatter trend, and keep all money figures consistently in millions of US dollars.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically sequenced from overview to details and generally easy to follow. It would benefit from clearer paragraphing and less chaining of figures in one long block.
Use a separate paragraph for Germany and France, and another for Italy and Austria, to make comparisons easier to scan.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary range is good, but several word choices are unnatural or too formal for the context, such as disbursed, highest payer, and expenses for Austrian.
Use natural reporting terms like spent, spending, expenditure, rose to, and overtook.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The grammar is mostly controlled, though there are recurring article, preposition, and plural errors.
Check countable nouns and prepositions in data phrases, especially dollars, spending on books, and reached, not reached to.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows how much people in four countries spent on purchasing books from 1995 to 2005.
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