The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
Sample Response
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of British people donatingratio of British citizens' contributions to charity by age groupbased on their age in 1990 and 2010two different years - 1990 and 2010. Overall, more British gave money to charity in 1990 than they did in 2010. However, people over 50 years old showed the opposite patterndid just the opposite and fewera fewer younger British peopleBritsh donated to charity than older adults in both yearsthan the adults did both in these years. In 1990, 42% of British people42% British aged 36 to 50between the age of 36 and 50 donated to charity and this proportionratio was the highest. In contrast, only around 17% of young adults17% youth from the 18-25 age-group contributed to charitythe philanthropy works which was the lowest. After two decades, both these percentages declined significantly, 35% and 7% respectively. While the donation rate among peopledonation participation by the people up to 50 years old decreased in 2010, it rosesored among the people over 50 years old. In 2010, welfare donation by 51–65 age group51-56 age-group was 38%, an increase from 1990a raise than 1990 and the figure reached 35% for the 65+ age groupit was 35% by the 65+ age group, also an increase.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a relevant overview and selects the highest and lowest figures effectively, including the contrasting change among older donors. Its main limitation is uneven precision: the 51–65 group is mislabelled as 51–56, the 26–35 category receives no detailed coverage, and several values or trend words are approximate or overstated. Prioritise checking every age label and reporting balanced comparisons across all groups.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several key comparisons are provided, but one age range is mislabelled, one group is omitted from the details, and minor numerical inaccuracies remain.
Cover all five age groups and copy each age label and percentage directly from the chart before comparing the two years.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves logically from an overview to selected 1990 and 2010 details, but the single paragraph and compressed final comparisons weaken clarity.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping the three younger declines apart from the two older increases.
Lexical Resource
Some useful charity and trend vocabulary is attempted, but frequent spelling errors and unnatural choices such as ‘philanthropy works’ and ‘a raise’ reduce precision.
Prefer standard terms including ‘donated to charity’, ‘donation rate’, ‘rose’, and ‘increase’, and proofread spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses some complex structures, but frequent article, agreement, comparison, and noun-phrase errors make several sentences awkward.
Revise percentage phrases to use ‘of’, control comparative forms, and split overloaded sentences into clear independent comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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