The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table illustrates the data on the police budget from which the money camein which the money came from and the two pie charts describe the distribution of the amount of money in the years 2017 and 2018in the two of year 2017 and 2018 in an area of Britain. Overall, there was an upward trend in all three different sources while the money spent on salaries was always the largest share of expendituremajority of contribution.
In terms of income sources,Looking into more details, the largest portion of fundinghighest amount of money on the police budget belonged to National Government, providing 175.5 million pounds in 2017 and rising to 177.8 million pounds in 2018‘National Government’, 175.5 million pounds in 2017 and it kept rising to 177.8 million pounds. ThisThus was followed by ‘Local Taxes’, at 91.2 million pounds in 2017, after one year, it increasedincrease significantly to 102.3 million pounds.
In terms of howIn term of the how the money was spent, the majority of police budget went to salaries, which weregoes to salaries which was for officers and staff, dropping slightly from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018. Meanwhile, the proportion of ‘Buildings and transport’ remained constantconstantly, at 17% each year. An opposite pattern can be seen in the category of technology, where the figuretechnology, its figure rose sharply from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018, which was always the lowest proportionrate during the given period.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively identifies key trends and presents clear information for both the table and pie charts. The primary limitation is the complete omission of data for 'Other sources' in the body paragraph alongside noticeable grammatical inaccuracies. To improve, ensure all categories from the visual data are fully reported while proofreading for tense and preposition control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A relevant overview is provided and key features are highlighted, though specific statistics for 'Other sources' are missing from the detailed body paragraphs.
Ensure every category listed in the source visual is explicitly supported with key figures in the detail paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped into distinct paragraphs, but cohesive devices are occasionally awkward or misused.
Refine transitional expressions like 'In term of the how' and 'Thus was followed' to ensure smooth logical flow.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient variety of vocabulary is used to describe changes and comparisons, though some word choices are inaccurate.
Focus on accurate word collocations and forms, such as replacing 'remained constantly' with 'remained constant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence patterns is attempted, but grammatical errors in tense and prepositions occur regularly.
Review subject-verb agreement and past tense verb endings when reporting historical data.