The charts show information about the number of kilometres travelled in an average month and the distribution of vehicle types in Britain.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the distance of kilometres covered by travelling in three different mods over 20 years and the pie chart depicts the number of vehicles issued in Britain.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from both charts that maximum distance was covered with transport & delivery. Meanwhile, cars were the most popular vehicle and had the highest sales over the years.
In detail, the highest kilometres travelled for transport and delivery began at nearby 6500 km in 1990, surprisingly this ratio skyrocketed by 15,00 km and hit its peak at an explosive 8000 km in 1995 following this ratio was remained unchanged for next five years. Unfortunately, this trend turned negative and plummeted to 7,000 km in 2005, next by five years, and this number went down sharply to hit bottom at 6000 km in the final year. Moreover, 3000 km were covered by people in a month with a personal purpose in 1990, and this value is steadily fairly inclined at 3500 km after a slight recovery this number got crashed at 3000 km 2010. therefore, around 1900 km was done by commuters in 1990, and this number remained the same for the next 15 years, but this value rose to about 500 km in 2010.
Furthermore, according to the sales of vehicle types in 1990 the highest mode of transport was Car which issued with shares at 63% in 1980 but this number got declined by 4% after 20 years. Following this, 25% of trucks were distributed in 1994 generalities this rate increased by 5% after 20 years in Britain. It is interesting to note that the rest three modes of vehicles had a minor distribution in 20 years which were buses, motorcycles and others, with shares at 6%, 9% and 2% in 1990. Still, this number had slight changes at 5% of buses 3% of motorcycles in the last only 3% of other vehicles distributed in 2010.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct measurement phrase Original: distance Suggested revision: number Why it matters: Distance is measured in kilometres, so this phrase is incorrectly formed.
- 2. Name the categories Original: mods Suggested revision: purposes Why it matters: The line chart groups travel by purpose, and “mods” is the wrong word.
- 3. Describe the pie charts Original: number of vehicles issued Suggested revision: distribution of vehicle types Why it matters: The pie charts show percentage shares of vehicle types rather than vehicles being issued.
- 4. State the leading purpose Original: maximum distance was covered with transport & delivery Suggested revision: the greatest distance was travelled for transport and delivery Why it matters: This accurately identifies the purpose with the highest monthly distance.
- 5. Avoid unsupported sales claim Original: had the highest sales over the years Suggested revision: accounted for the largest share in both years Why it matters: The visuals compare vehicle shares in two years, not sales across a period.
- 6. Use approximation correctly Original: at nearby 6500 km Suggested revision: at approximately 6,500 km Why it matters: “Approximately” is the correct adverb for an estimated chart value.
- 7. Correct the increase Original: skyrocketed by 15,00 km Suggested revision: rose by about 1,300 km Why it matters: The line rises from roughly 6,500 to just under 8,000 kilometres, not by 15,000.
- 8. Report the peak neutrally Original: at an explosive 8000 km Suggested revision: at about 7,800 km Why it matters: The chart shows a value slightly below 8,000 and does not support emotive wording.
- 9. Fix passive construction Original: this ratio was remained unchanged Suggested revision: this figure remained unchanged Why it matters: “Remain” is intransitive here and cannot take the passive form.
- 10. Clarify time sequence Original: next by five years Suggested revision: five years later Why it matters: This time expression clearly links the 2005 and 2010 data points.
- 11. Use formal chart wording Original: hit bottom at 6000 km Suggested revision: reach its lowest point at 6,000 km Why it matters: This wording reports the final low point more precisely and formally.
- 12. Use the correct verb Original: is steadily fairly inclined at 3500 km Suggested revision: rose steadily to 3,500 km Why it matters: The past-tense verb and preposition correctly describe the upward movement.
Suggested Rewrites
- distance number
- mods purposes
- number of vehicles issued distribution of vehicle types
- maximum distance was covered with transport & delivery the greatest distance was travelled for transport and delivery
- had the highest sales over the years accounted for the largest share in both years
- at nearby 6500 km at approximately 6,500 km
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response provides a recognizable structure and identifies the dominant travel purpose and vehicle type, with several figures reported correctly. Its main weakness is accuracy: dates, commuting data, and some vehicle shares are misstated, while imprecise wording and frequent sentence-level errors make parts difficult to follow. The priority is to verify every value against the visuals and present comparisons in shorter, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several broadly correct figures are included, but multiple dates, vehicle shares, and commuting values are inaccurate.
Check every year and value against both charts, especially the commuting endpoint and the motorcycle shares.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses an appropriate introduction, overview, and detail grouping, but long run-on sentences and awkward linking weaken progression.
Divide the detail paragraphs into shorter comparison units and use connectors only where the relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent unsuitable collocations such as figures being issued or crashed reduce precision.
Use standard data-reporting combinations such as rose to, fell by, remained stable, and accounted for.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in clause boundaries, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction often strain clarity.
Build accurate simple and compound sentences first, then add controlled subordinate clauses without comma splices.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts show information about the number of kilometres travelled in an average month and the distribution of vehicle types in Britain.
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