Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
Sample Response
The diagram outlines the development that the Chorleywood village of London witnessed between 1868 and 1994. Overall, development works in this village were done in different periods and much of these constructions were done between 1970 and 1994. Interestingly, transportation facility defined the are of development in this village. According to the diagram, the motor road was established in 1970 while the railway was built in 1909 in Chorleywood. Before 1900, only a portion of the village was developed and later (between 1883 and 1922) the station was built and some development works were finished. The area near the station was then improved and during the end of this construction, in 1970 to be precise, the motorway was completed. After 1970, the expansion process seemed accelerated and many areas of the village came under the renovation process. At the beginning of 20th century, the railway was built. The land roads including the motorway, roads and railroads of this village connect almost all of the parts of the city and forms and hash like shape. The progress in this area had been done mostly based on the establishment of the transportation systems but the park and the golf course were placed in the middle of the village.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Article choice Original: the Chorleywood village Suggested revision: the village of Chorleywood Why it matters: This is the natural way to refer to the place.
- 2. Natural noun Original: development works Suggested revision: development Why it matters: Use “development” as an uncountable noun here.
- 3. Agreement error Original: much of these constructions were Suggested revision: much of this construction was Why it matters: “Much” takes a singular uncountable noun phrase.
- 4. Spelling error Original: defined the are of development Suggested revision: defined the area of development Why it matters: “are” is a spelling error for “area”.
- 5. Wrong label Original: motor road was established in 1970 Suggested revision: motorway was built in 1970 Why it matters: The map labels this route as a motorway, not a motor road.
- 6. Date sequence Original: later (between 1883 and 1922) Suggested revision: between 1883 and 1922 Why it matters: The word “later” is vague because the previous period ends in 1900 in your sentence.
- 7. Vague description Original: some development works were finished Suggested revision: new areas developed around the station and railway Why it matters: The map requires location-specific development, not a vague completion claim.
- 8. Wrong concept Original: renovation process Suggested revision: development process Why it matters: The map shows expansion/development, not renovation of existing areas.
- 9. Grammar and spelling Original: forms and hash like shape Suggested revision: formed a hash-like shape Why it matters: The verb and compound adjective need correction.
- 10. Wrong place type Original: parts of the city Suggested revision: parts of the village Why it matters: The task is about a village, not a city.
- 11. Sentence rewrite Original: Before 1900, only a portion of the village was developed and later (between 1883 and 1922) the station was built and some development works were finished. Suggested revision: Before 1883, only a small area near the main road was developed; between 1883 and 1922, development spread around Chorleywood Station and the railway. Why it matters: The rewrite fixes the chronology and locates the development more clearly.
- 12. Sentence rewrite Original: At the beginning of 20th century, the railway was built. Suggested revision: The railway, built in 1909, then encouraged development along the southern part of the village. Why it matters: This avoids repeating information and connects transport to growth.
Suggested Rewrites
- the Chorleywood village the village of Chorleywood
- development works development
- much of these constructions were much of this construction was
- defined the are of development defined the area of development
- motor road was established in 1970 motorway was built in 1970
- later (between 1883 and 1922) between 1883 and 1922
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The response describes the main development periods and links growth to transport routes, which is central to the map. However, it includes some inaccurate or unclear sequencing, repeats information about the railway, and does not precisely describe where the oldest and newest areas are located.
Describe each shaded development period by location relative to the station, railway, main road, motorway, and park, avoiding vague claims such as “renovation”.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a basic progression from overview to details, but the order is not fully controlled and several ideas are repeated.
Use one paragraph for early development around the station and one for the post-1970 expansion along the motorway.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sometimes effective, but several word choices are inaccurate for a map, including “renovation”, “city”, and “land roads”.
Use map-report terms such as “area”, “development”, “expanded”, “clustered”, “alongside”, and “to the east/west”.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent grammar and word-form errors reduce precision, though the overall meaning is usually recoverable.
Revise articles, prepositions, and noun forms, especially in phrases describing locations and transport links.