The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Sample Response
The diagram depicts the changes to the roadway approach to the city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
In 2007 there was a direct way from city road to hospital. In which various changes have been noticed throughout the time. There was Bus stop around the hospital road which was later converted into a bus station on the right side of the hospital road and connected to the roundabout on both sides of the hospital road.
There was a Car park and staff and public park on the left side of the hospital road. In 2010 it was declared as a staff car park as well as public car park moved to the east side of the ring road and connected to it.
Overall, A new bus station has been constructed which was connected with the roundabout on both sides with a city hospital and city road.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use plural noun Original: diagram Suggested revision: maps Why it matters: The task contains two maps, so the reference must be plural.
- 2. Use task wording Original: roadway approach Suggested revision: road access Why it matters: 'Road access' is the natural and precise term for the feature shown.
- 3. Use precise phrase Original: direct way Suggested revision: direct route via Hospital Road Why it matters: The map shows Hospital Road forming the direct route to the hospital ring road.
- 4. Fix names and article Original: from city road to hospital Suggested revision: from City Road to the hospital Why it matters: The road name requires capitals and 'hospital' needs the definite article here.
- 5. Correct number and form Original: There was Bus stop Suggested revision: There were six bus stops Why it matters: The 2007 map shows six separate bus stops.
- 6. Correct bus-stop location Original: around the hospital road Suggested revision: along both sides of Hospital Road Why it matters: The stops were positioned on the two sides of Hospital Road.
- 7. Describe replacement Original: converted into Suggested revision: replaced by Why it matters: The bus stops were removed and a separate bus station was created.
- 8. Correct map direction Original: right Suggested revision: west Why it matters: The new bus station is west of Hospital Road, on the left of the 2010 map.
- 9. Correct road links Original: connected to the roundabout on both sides of the hospital road Suggested revision: linked to the roundabouts at both ends of Hospital Road Why it matters: The station connects separately to the northern and southern roundabouts.
- 10. Fix car-park phrase Original: There was a Car park and staff and public park Suggested revision: There was a staff and public car park Why it matters: The original wording incorrectly separates one shared car park into multiple features.
- 11. Correct car-park location Original: on the left side of the hospital road Suggested revision: on the east side of Hospital Road Why it matters: The shared car park appears to the east of Hospital Road in 2007.
- 12. Fix capitalization Original: A Suggested revision: a Why it matters: The article following the introductory adverb should not be capitalized.
Suggested Rewrites
- diagram maps
- roadway approach road access
- direct way direct route via Hospital Road
- from city road to hospital from City Road to the hospital
- There was Bus stop There were six bus stops
- around the hospital road along both sides of Hospital Road
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies several important changes, particularly the bus station, roundabouts, and revised parking, and its broad organization remains understandable. However, incorrect locations, omitted details, and a limited overview weaken the visual account, while frequent sentence-structure and article errors make some descriptions difficult to follow. The priority is to compare the maps systematically and express each change in a complete, accurately controlled sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report covers some central changes, but it misstates several locations, omits key details, and provides an overview focused mainly on the bus station.
Summarize both major developments in the overview and verify the positions of the bus station and each car park against the maps.
Coherence and Cohesion
The basic introduction, detail paragraphs, and overview create a recognizable structure, but progression is weakened by fragments, repetition, and loosely connected changes.
Group the 2007 layout and 2010 changes systematically, using one complete sentence for each comparison.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of map-related vocabulary, but repeated wording and inaccurate collocations such as declared as reduce clarity and precision.
Use precise change verbs such as relocated, designated, replaced, and constructed, while avoiding repeated references to hospital road.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but frequent fragments, article errors, faulty coordination, and agreement problems sometimes strain meaning.
Prioritise complete sentence boundaries and check articles and verb forms before adding subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
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