The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
Sample Response
The first graph above shows information regarding computer ownership as a percentage of the population between the years 2002 and 2010. The second graph shows the computer ownership rates in 2002 and 2010percentage of computer ownership in 2002 and 2010 by level of education.
From the year 2002 to 2010, the percentage of the population who owned computers increased steadilyhad increased steadily. It started at approximately 55% in 2002 and ended2002, and ended at approximately 70% in 2010.
This steady upward trend is also present in the second graph. In the year 2002, the percentage of computer ownership increased quite steadily as the level of education increased. Individuals with a postgraduate qualification had the highest percentage of computer ownership, while individuals without a high school diploma had the lowest computer ownership rateexperienced the lowest percentage of computer ownership. The year 2010 depicted a very similar correlation between the percentages of computer ownership and the individual’s education level. However, all the figures in 2010 were higher than the figures for 2002figures presented in the year 2002.
In conclusion, the percentage of the population who owned a computer rose gradually between the years 2002 and 2010. In addition, there wasIn addition, there was also a positive relationship between computer ownership and education level, in both the years 2002 and 2010.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is well organized and communicates both overarching patterns clearly, especially the steady rise in overall ownership and the positive relationship with education. However, coverage is too general: the education chart receives almost no numerical support, and the 2010 overall figure is understated. The most important improvement is to select and compare representative values from every education group while checking all reported endpoints against the charts.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Both main trends and the highest and lowest education groups are identified accurately, but most category values and comparisons are omitted and the final ownership figure is understated.
Support the overview with representative figures across all five education levels and report the overall rise from about 55% to 75% accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses clearly from the overall time trend to the education comparison, with effective paragraphing and generally appropriate linking.
Replace the repetitive concluding paragraph with additional comparative detail from the second chart.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of trend and comparison vocabulary conveys the main relationships, although repeated phrases and some awkward choices limit precision.
Vary repeated expressions such as ‘percentage of computer ownership’ and prefer precise chart language such as ‘proportion of people owning a computer’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence forms is handled with generally good control, and the few tense and phrasing errors do not impede meaning.
Use the simple past consistently for completed historical trends and check noun phrases for natural agreement and reference.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
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