The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The provided pie graph and table presentpresents specific information regarding the career path of undergraduate students majoringmajor in Anthropology and their salaries afterin five years from a specific university.
Overall, a notable pattern emerges that the largest segment of the pie chart is dedicated to full-time work, which is in sharp contrast with the part-time work and postgraduate study. Turning to the table, it is evident that there is a significant similarity in freelance consultantssonsultants and government sector, whereas private companies show a more centralized distribution.
A closer analysis of data reveals that full-time work occupied the largest share of the total number of graduates, at 52%, while part-time work combined with postgrad studypart-time and postgrad study formed the smallest group at 5%. In addition, the students who were unemployed and did part-time worktook part-time works had a similar figure, standing at 12% and 15% respectively. Besides that, the same proportion appeared in two categories at 8%with the figure for 8%, which were full-time postgrad study and not known.
Notably, the figure for freelance consultants and the government sectorfor freelance consultant and government sector had a lot in common and also a slight difference. The vast majority of graduates earned more than $75,000 annually in both categoriesfor both two categories, at 80% of the total. Meanwhile, those who received salariesthose received salaries yearly from $25,000 to $49,999 and from $50,000 to $74,999 accounted for 5% and 15% respectively for both categories. In more detail,However, to break down, freelance consultants had an even percentage at 40% in terms of staff earningearned $75,000-$99,999 and more than $100,000. While for government sector, the percentage of graduates who made more than $100,000 is slightly larger than that of earningearing $75,000-$99,999. Meanwhile, graduates in private companies who earned between $50,000 and $99,999the middle level ($50,000-99,999) made up a combined 60%, with 10% in the lowest bracket and 30% earning $100,000+dominated this category at 60%.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response effectively highlights key patterns from both the pie chart and table, presenting accurate statistics and a clear overall trend. However, small grammatical slips and minor mechanical errors in vocabulary choices slightly hinder overall polish. Focusing on error-free sentence structures and refined collocations will significantly enhance writing quality.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends and accurate statistics from both visual features are fully covered with a clear overview.
Refine overview wording to describe data trends more precisely without overgeneralizing percentage totals.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically across clear paragraphs with appropriate linking phrases.
Use more natural transitions instead of informal or mechanical expressions like besides that or to break down.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic-specific vocabulary is used accurately to describe figures and percentages, despite minor typos.
Proofread carefully to fix typos such as sonsultants and ensure precise word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is attempted, though minor errors in subject-verb agreement and participle clauses recur.
Review tense, subject-verb agreement, and reduced relative clauses to increase accuracy in complex sentences.