The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Sales: week of October 7-13 Mon. Tues. Wed. Thus. Fri. Sat. Sun. Lunch $2,400 $2,450 $2,595 $2,375 $2,500 $1,950 $1,550 Dinner $3,623 $3,850 $3,445 $3,800 $4,350 $2,900
Sample Response
The table data represents information on sales of a downtown small restaurant of a typical October week starting from the 7th October till 13th October. As is presented, the restaurant's earning from dinner is far higher than the earning from lunch except for the weekend - Sunday.
On Monday, the beginning of the week, the restaurant sells lunch of 24 hundred dollars compared to the sale amount of dinner of 3623 dollars. The sells of dinner compared to lunch is significantly higher than the sell of lunch for the six days of the mentioned week except for the Sunday. The sale of lunch on Tuesday remains almost same as it is on Monday but the dinner sells increase by almost 200 dollars. The earning from the dinner is lowest on Saturday and it is less than 3000 dollar. In the weekend the lunches bring an amount of 1550 dollar compared to 2450 dollar of dinner.
The restaurant earns about 15 thousand dollars a week by selling the lunch and on the contrary, earns about 22 thousand dollars by selling dinner.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use overview signal Original: As is presented Suggested revision: Overall Why it matters: ‘Overall’ clearly marks the report’s main summary.
- 2. Use plural earnings Original: restaurant's earning from dinner Suggested revision: restaurant's dinner earnings Why it matters: ‘Earnings’ is plural when referring to sales revenue.
- 3. Use plural earnings Original: the earning from lunch Suggested revision: its lunch earnings Why it matters: The plural noun ‘earnings’ is required for revenue.
- 4. Correct overall comparison Original: except for the weekend - Sunday Suggested revision: throughout the week Why it matters: Dinner sales exceed lunch sales on every day, including both weekend days.
- 5. Remove redundant wording Original: On Monday, the beginning of the week Suggested revision: On Monday Why it matters: The day name already identifies the beginning of the period.
- 6. Correct sales expression Original: the restaurant sells lunch of 24 hundred dollars Suggested revision: the restaurant's lunch sales were $2,400 Why it matters: The revision uses past tense and the correct noun structure for a monetary total.
- 7. Use concise revenue phrase Original: sale amount of dinner of 3623 dollars Suggested revision: dinner sales of $3,623 Why it matters: ‘Dinner sales’ is the natural term for this figure.
- 8. Correct tense and article Original: sale of lunch on Tuesday remains almost same as it is on Monday Suggested revision: lunch sales on Tuesday remained almost the same as on Monday Why it matters: The report needs past tense, plural ‘sales’, and the article in ‘the same’.
- 9. Use sales noun Original: the dinner sells Suggested revision: dinner sales Why it matters: ‘Sales’ is the required noun; ‘sells’ is a verb.
- 10. Correct Tuesday change Original: increase by almost 200 dollars Suggested revision: increased by just over $200 Why it matters: Dinner sales rose by $227 from Monday to Tuesday.
- 11. Use revenue wording Original: The earning from the dinner Suggested revision: Dinner revenue Why it matters: This is a concise and natural way to name the category’s earnings.
- 12. Correct lowest day Original: is lowest on Saturday Suggested revision: was lowest on Sunday Why it matters: Dinner sales were $2,450 on Sunday, below Saturday’s $2,900.
Suggested Rewrites
- As is presented Overall
- restaurant's earning from dinner restaurant's dinner earnings
- the earning from lunch its lunch earnings
- except for the weekend - Sunday throughout the week
- On Monday, the beginning of the week On Monday
- the restaurant sells lunch of 24 hundred dollars the restaurant's lunch sales were $2,400
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is organised into an introduction, details, and totals, and it makes a few accurate weekday comparisons. However, its central overview and several key figures are inaccurate: dinner sales exceeded lunch every day, Sunday—not Saturday—had the lowest dinner sales, and the dinner total was about $24,400 rather than $22,000. The priority is to identify the true highs, lows, and overall pattern before selecting supporting data.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Achievement
Some daily values and the general advantage of dinner sales are reported, but the overview, lowest dinner figure, weekend comparison, and weekly total contain major inaccuracies.
State that dinner outsold lunch every day, identify Friday and Wednesday as the respective peaks, and calculate the weekly totals accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three-paragraph structure gives the report a basic progression, but repetitive statements and loosely selected comparisons make development uneven.
Use one overview paragraph followed by a detail paragraph grouping weekday peaks and weekend lows instead of repeating the dinner-lunch contrast.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary communicates the basic topic, but frequent confusion among 'sell,' 'sale,' 'sales,' and 'earnings' makes expression repetitive and imprecise.
Use accurate noun phrases such as 'lunch sales,' 'dinner revenue,' 'the restaurant earned,' and 'sales rose.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple meanings remain understandable, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, countable nouns, and comparative structures limit grammatical control.
Make subjects agree with verbs and use plural currency nouns, for example 'dinner sales were higher' and '2,900 dollars.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Sales: week of October 7-13 Mon. Tues. Wed. Thus. Fri. Sat. Sun. Lunch $2,400 $2,450 $2,595 $2,375 $2,500 $1,950 $1,550 Dinner $3,623 $3,850 $3,445 $3,800 $4,350 $2,900
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