The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Sample Response
The pie chart shows the proportion of four major types of transport that people use in Edmonton and the table indicates why people use their cars in the city.
As can be seen from the pie chart, cars are the most popular meanscar is the most popular means of transport, accounting for 45% of the total. The second most popular form of transport is the LRT, which accounts for 35%which represents 35%, while the usage of bus and taxi only occupies 10% respectively.
The table gives more detailed information about people’s purposes for using their cars. DeleteSurprisingly, 55% of people use cars to commute to work. Cars are also used frequentlyused a lot for business purposes (45%) and for taking children to school (40%). However, only 15% of people use cars for shoppingneed the cars for shopping and, similarly, 15% use cars for leisure activitiesanother 15% of them go for leisure activities by car.
Overall, there are multiple choices of transport for people living in Edmonton but a lot of people depend on cars for travelling.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response accurately reports all figures from both diagrams and highlights the dominance of cars, with a clean progression from transport modes to reasons for car use. Its main limitation is occasional imprecision in wording and agreement, such as treating two modes as a singular subject and using awkward expressions for proportions. Refine those phrases and make the overview more specific by naming commuting as the leading reason.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All figures are accurately selected and compared, while the overview identifies car dominance but does not foreground commuting as the leading purpose.
Make the overview synthesise one principal feature from each visual: car dominance and commuting as the main reason for car use.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves logically from transport shares to car-use purposes, with clear paragraphing and well-managed links between comparisons.
Place the overview directly after the introduction to frame the detailed figures more immediately.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally clear, though phrases such as "usage of bus and taxi occupies" and "need the cars" are unnatural.
Use precise forms such as "bus and taxi each account for" and "use cars for shopping".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex structures are mostly well controlled, with occasional subject-verb agreement and article errors.
Check agreement with compound subjects and choose singular or plural forms consistently when referring to cars and transport modes.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
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