The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The line charts present the changes in the percentage of households with three electrical appliances and the number of hours of housework per week in households in a country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall, the number of hours of housework per week decreased considerablyhad a considerable decrease while the percentage of households with electrical appliances rose significantlyhad a significant increase. The ownership of three different electrical appliances in households all increased.
In 1920, washing machines were the most common electrical appliance, with approximately 40% of households owning them, compared with about 30% for vacuum cleaners and almost none for refrigerators. However,But the percentage of households with washing machines increased at the slowest pacemost slowly, reaching over 70% in 2019. The ownership of refrigerators had the most significant increase throughout the period. This figure reached approximately 100% in 1980 before remainingkeeping stable at this level. The proportion of households owning vacuum cleaners also increased substantially, reaching its peak of approximately 100 percent byin 2000, where it remained until 2019and then plateaued.
The number of hours of housework per week decreased dramatically from 1920 to 1980, falling from about 50 to around 15. This figure then plateaued at this level before falling slightly to about 10 hours in 2019.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear and accurate overview comparing key trends across both line graphs with relevant data points. Paragraph structure and logical ordering are effective, supported by range and precision in vocabulary and grammatical structures. To further enhance the report, focus on combining sentence structures more seamlessly and making finer data comparisons between the categories.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All main trends and key figures from both charts are selected and reported accurately with a clear overview.
Incorporate more precise comparative data analysis between the three appliances across key years to make the description richer.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically into clear paragraphs with smoothly integrated transition markers.
Vary cohesive devices slightly more to avoid relying on repetitive sentence starters like 'This figure'.
Lexical Resource
A good range of trend and statistical vocabulary is used flexibly and appropriately throughout.
Use more varied lexical collocations when describing stability and steady increases to expand your vocabulary range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of complex sentence structures is used accurately with minimal grammatical errors.
Combine short, simple sentences using subordinate clauses or participle phrases to increase grammatical complexity.