The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The line charts present the changes in the percentage of households with three electrical appliances and thethree electrical appliances and the number of hours of housework per week in households in a country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall, the number of hours of housework per week decreased considerablyhad a considerable decrease while the percentage of households with electrical appliances rose significantlyhad a significant increase. The ownership of three different electrical appliances in households all increased.
In 1920, washing machines were the most common electrical appliance, with approximately 40% of households owningowing them, compared with about 30% for vacuum cleaners and almost none for refrigerators. However, the percentageBut the percentage of householdshousehold with washing machines increased the leastmost slowly, reaching over 70% in 2019. Thein 2019 The ownership of refrigerators had the most significant increase throughoutthoughout the period. This figure reached approximately 100% in 1980 before remainingkeeping stable at this level. The proportion of households owning vacuum cleanershouseholds owned vacuum cleaner also increased substantially, reaching its peakreaching to its peak of approximately 100 percent in 2000, and then plateaued.
The number of hours of housework per week decreaseddecrease dramatically from 1920 to 1980, falling from about 50 to around 15just over 10. This figure then plateaued around 15 hours until 2000 beforeat this level before falling slightly to about 10 hours10% in 2019.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response effectively highlights key trends and supports them with accurate data from both charts. The main limitation lies in minor grammatical inaccuracies and minor word-choice or spelling errors. To improve performance, focus on refining verb tense consistency and polishing word formation in data descriptions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and key figures are well highlighted with a clear overall summary provided.
Ensure all unit references are fully accurate, avoiding minor errors such as confusing percentages with hours of housework.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized into distinct paragraphs with clear progression throughout.
Vary cohesive devices slightly more to create even smoother transitions between key features.
Lexical Resource
A good range of trend vocabulary is used appropriately to describe changes over time.
Proofread carefully to eliminate minor spelling and word form typos such as owing for owning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structure types is attempted, though several verb tense and preposition errors occur.
Ensure past tense verbs are consistently applied when describing historical data trends.