The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.
Sample Response
The given bar chart illustrates the average prices per kilometre of clothingprices per kilometre of goods imported into the European Unionwhich is being brought fromby six different countries in 1993 and 2003.
Overall, the chart shows thatit is clearly seen that Argentina had the highest price per kilometre of clothingprices per kilometre in clothing in 1993 while Bangladesh had the lowestas compared to Bangladesh. Whereas, in 2003, japan had low prices as compared to other countries.
In 1993, Argentina and Brazil had the highest pricesonly Argentina and Brazil had high prices ( approximatelyappropriately 28 and 23 pounds) respectively. Whereas, there has been a decrease in the prices in countries Japan, China and India ( 15, 10 and 7 pounds) respectively. In addition, Bangladesh hadhas the lowest price among all six countriesthe lowest amongst all the countries at approximately 3 pounds.
In 2003, there was an upsurge in the prices in all countries except Bangladesh, which has only 7 pounds. However, Japan and India were about £13 and £12Japan and India have about 12 and 14 pounds respectively. Furthermore, Argentina, Brazil and China were priced athave increased by approximately £26, £23 and £17(26, 23 and 17 pounds) respectively.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response provides a clear four-paragraph structure and reports many individual bar values with reasonable accuracy. Its main weakness is the description of change: it incorrectly claims that almost all countries experienced an increase and overlooks that Argentina and Japan fell, Brazil was stable, and Bangladesh still rose. Prioritise a factually accurate overview of these mixed trends, then compare the two years directly for each country using consistent past-tense structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Many approximate values are included, but the overview and statements about increases and decreases misrepresent the chart's principal trends.
State that China, India, and Bangladesh rose, Argentina and Japan fell, and Brazil remained unchanged, then support these trends with paired figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a recognisable introduction-overview-details structure, but sentence fragments beginning with 'Whereas' and mechanical connectors disrupt the flow.
Use complete comparative sentences and organise the details by countries that rose, fell, or stayed stable.
Lexical Resource
The response uses some relevant trend vocabulary, but frequent imprecision and word-choice errors such as 'appropriately' and 'goods ... brought by countries' weaken accuracy.
Use exact expressions such as 'approximately,' 'clothing imported from,' 'rose to,' and 'fell from.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually clear, but tense shifts, fragments, article errors, capitalisation, and faulty comparative structures occur frequently.
Maintain the past tense throughout and combine contrast clauses into complete sentences with accurate subjects and verbs.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.
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