The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.
Sample Response
The bar graph illustrates the average price per kilometre of clothing imported intoto the European Union from six countriessix varied nations, namely Argentina, Brazil, Japan, China, India, and Bangladesh. The years under consideration areis 1993 and 2003. The price unitBesides, the price unit is given in poundswas considered in pounds.
Overall, the highest clothing price was for Argentinathe top-most export clothing nation is Argentina in both yearsboth of the years, whereas Bangladesh had the lowest priceBangladesh is with the least price in both years. Furthermore, Brazil had the same price in both yearsfrom a decade onwards without any fluctuations or a plunge.
Turning to ArgentinaTo commence with, Argentina was the highest price, atthe highest export price costing about £28about approximately above 25 pounds in the year 1993. Besides, there was a slight decline toin the year 2003 with about £26just above 25 pounds nearly 26 pounds. Meanwhile, Brazil had the same price in both yearshad a similar price in both years, and it remained unchanged at nearly £23 across the decadethere are no changes in a decade which was nearly 23 pounds.
Conversely, Japan is exporting with the price of 15 pounds to European Union in the year of 1993, whereas, slightly decline in the year of 2003 with almost 2 pounds less. On the other hand, China and India are selling price with 10 pounds and just above 5 pounds in the year 1993. With the advancement in the market, there is a climb in 2003 for both of the nations with approximately 16 pounds in china and 12 pounds in India. Last but not least, Bangladesh is the least price exporting their clothing with nearly 3 pounds in 1993 and 6 pounds in 2003.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report covers all six countries, provides a clear overview, and generally represents the trends and relative values accurately. Its main limitation is frequent awkward grammar and imprecise collocation, which sometimes obscures otherwise sound comparisons. The highest priority is to describe prices with direct past-tense structures and exact subjects, avoiding phrases such as export clothing nation and selling price with.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview correctly identifies the highest and lowest countries and Brazil's stability, while the body covers every country with mostly accurate values.
Report Argentina's 1993 figure and India's starting value more precisely, and avoid redundant approximations such as about approximately above.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure and country grouping provide clear overall progression, although some linking expressions are mechanical or illogical.
Choose connectors for their exact relationship and rely more on direct comparisons instead of repeatedly signalling each new country.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range for describing change and stability, but frequent inaccurate collocations make the account sound unnatural.
Use standard chart language such as clothing prices, remained unchanged, fell to, and rose from rather than improvised export phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences, but frequent agreement, tense, article, and clause-formation errors weaken accuracy throughout.
Use consistent past-tense subject-verb patterns, for example Japan's price fell from 15 pounds to 13 pounds.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.
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