The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.
Sample Response
The bar graph shows average price the European Union (EU) spent for per kilometre clothing import from six different years in 1993 and 2003. It is obvious that the EU paid the highest amount for each kilometre costume to Argentina. According to the illustration, the EU spent the highest amount for clothing import from Argentina which was approximately 28 pounds per kilometre in 1993. This rate was significantly higher; almost 9 times higher than the rate it gave to Bangladesh. The second and third highest rates were given to Brazil and Japan, roughly 23 and 15 pounds respectively. China and India got less than that and their rate was higher than the import rate from Bangladesh. The latter received only around 3 pound per kilo which was almost three times less than the rate paid to Japan. The rate went higher in 2003 for China, India and Bangladesh who were the least paid countries in a decade earlier. The price for costume import from Brazil remained unchanged while slightly declined for Argentina and Japan. Despite the price changes, Argentina and Brazil were still highly paid than that of India and Bangladesh while China’s price went as high as 17 pounds, almost double than that of 1993’s rate.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use clothing correctly Original: each kilometre costume Suggested revision: each kilometre of clothing Why it matters: Costume does not accurately refer to the clothing imports measured in the chart.
- 2. Correct the direction Original: to Suggested revision: from Why it matters: The clothing was imported from Argentina, so from is the required preposition.
- 3. Describe the price Original: spent the highest amount for clothing import from Argentina Suggested revision: paid the highest price for clothing imported from Argentina Why it matters: The chart compares import prices rather than total amounts spent.
- 4. Attach the figure Original: which was approximately Suggested revision: at approximately Why it matters: At approximately links the price figure directly to the preceding import description.
- 5. Correct the ratio Original: almost 9 times higher Suggested revision: almost nine times as high Why it matters: A value near £28 is almost nine times as high as a value near £3, not nine times higher.
- 6. Clarify the comparison Original: the rate it gave to Bangladesh Suggested revision: the price paid for imports from Bangladesh Why it matters: This wording accurately identifies the price and country of origin.
- 7. Use import phrasing Original: rates were given to Brazil and Japan Suggested revision: prices were paid for imports from Brazil and Japan Why it matters: Rates are not given to countries in this context.
- 8. Use precise comparison Original: got less than that Suggested revision: had lower prices Why it matters: The revision states directly what the bars compare.
- 9. Match the subjects Original: their rate was higher Suggested revision: their prices were higher Why it matters: The plural subject China and India requires the plural noun prices.
- 10. Fix unit expression Original: 3 pound per kilo Suggested revision: £3 per kilometre Why it matters: The plural unit and chart terminology should be expressed consistently.
- 11. Correct the comparison Original: almost three times less than the rate paid to Japan Suggested revision: one-fifth of the price paid for imports from Japan Why it matters: The chart shows about £3 for Bangladesh and £15 for Japan in 1993.
- 12. Use natural trend language Original: The rate went higher Suggested revision: Prices increased Why it matters: Prices increased is the standard wording for an upward change.
Suggested Rewrites
- each kilometre costume each kilometre of clothing
- to from
- spent the highest amount for clothing import from Argentina paid the highest price for clothing imported from Argentina
- which was approximately at approximately
- almost 9 times higher almost nine times as high
- the rate it gave to Bangladesh the price paid for imports from Bangladesh
Why this response received Band 6.0
The strongest feature is broad coverage of all six countries and both years, with most major directions and rankings correctly identified. The main limitation is a weak overall trend summary plus inaccurate comparisons between Bangladesh and Japan and in describing China’s rise as almost double, compounded by persistent unnatural chart language. Prioritise an accurate overview of rises, falls and stability, then use precise price-per-kilometre wording and controlled comparative forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report covers every country, selects many accurate values and identifies the main increases and decreases, but the overview is limited and two proportional comparisons are inaccurate.
Summarise that China, India and Bangladesh rose, Brazil was stable, and Argentina and Japan fell, then compare values using exact differences or ratios.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the 1993 rankings to changes in 2003, but the single-paragraph presentation and some loosely connected clauses weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs, grouping the 1993 ranking first and the cross-year changes second.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of trend and ranking language, but frequent word-choice errors such as “costume,” “rate it gave” and “least paid countries” undermine precision.
Refer consistently to “clothing import prices,” countries the EU imported from, and prices that rose, fell or remained unchanged.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains generally clear, but errors in articles, prepositions, plurals and comparative structures occur throughout, including fragments and forms such as “double than.”
Practise complete subject-verb clauses and comparison patterns such as “twice as high as” and “higher than,” while checking articles and units.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.
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