The chart below shows the percentage changes in car ownership among households in a European country from 1971 to 2001.
Sample Response
The bar chart illustrates the percentageprecentage changes in car ownership among households in a European country from 1971 to 2001.
Overall, the percentage of owning no car decreased during the three decades, whereas the percentage of owning one or two carstwo or one car showed an upwardincrease trend.
In 1971, the percentage of owning no car reached its peak of approximately 48%, then continued to decrease to nearly 30% in 1991, then remained stable. We can also find that in 1971 and in 1981, owningowing no car was the most common categorytop trend Deletein that time. However, following this declineBut due to the decrease of that, owning one car became the highest in 1991 and in 2001.
Turning to single-car ownership, the figure decreasedHowever, the percentage of owning one car decreased from around 37% in 1971 to about 35% in 1981. After that decrease, the percentagepercantage of owning one car climbed to a peak of approximately 48%. Due to the increase of the percentagepersentage of two carscar, from just over 20% in 1991nearly 21% in 1991 to about 30% in 2001, the percentage of owning one car fell slightly to around 43%dropped to 42% steadily in 2001.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The candidate successfully identifies the main trends in household car ownership and provides a clear overview of the data. However, the response lacks systematic coverage of all categories, such as the early figures for households owning two cars, and contains repetitive vocabulary alongside spelling errors. To improve, structure the detailed paragraphs chronologically or by category to ensure complete coverage, and refine grammatical phrasing for precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and main trends are highlighted clearly, though details for the two-car category in earlier years are omitted.
Ensure all key features across every category and time period are fully presented and supported with accurate data.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into distinct paragraphs, but some transition phrases feel mechanical or informal.
Use more varied and natural academic linking expressions to connect comparative statements smoothly.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to describe trends, but repetitive phrasing and frequent spelling mistakes are present.
Vary word choice for proportion and ownership while double-checking the spelling of key terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures is attempted with generally clear meaning, despite noticeable grammatical inaccuracies.
Focus on correcting prepositions, noun-adjective forms, and noun plurals to increase grammatical accuracy.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the percentage changes in car ownership among households in a European country from 1971 to 2001.
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