The charts show the info about the use of Internet in five countries in Erope in 2000.
Sample Response
The figure, consisting of a bar graph and a pie chart, provides statisticsprovides related statistics on the Internet useInternet usage pattern in five European countries in 2000. Specifically, the former plots the percentages of the population using the Internetthe percentages of users among the population while the latter shows average expenditure per personindividual expenditure on online shopping, measured in euros.
Overall, althoughalbeit Sweden ranked first in the proportionproportions of Internet users, people in the UK outspent thosethe British outspent people from other countries on online shopping. It is also apparent that Spain ranked last in both chartsSpain bottomed both of the lists.
Concerning the bar graph, Sweden headed the listheading the list was Sweden, with 35% of the population using the Internetgetting access to the Internet. Following this country, in the UK, Germany, France, and Spain, the percentages of Internet users were 20%, 15%, 10%, and 5%.
As for the pieremaining chart, the UK overtookdisplaced Sweden (76 euros per person) to rank firstto end in the first place, with average spending of €87 per person87 euros being the money each person allocated to online purchases. Shopping expenditure for an individual hovered around half in France (57%) and Germany (46%). Spain ranked lastSpain was low ranking when its nationals only spared €10 per persona tenth of their earnings on online purchasesfor making orders on the websites.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview, covers every country, and organises the two visuals into an easy-to-follow comparison with generally varied language. Its main weakness is data reporting: France and Germany are incorrectly labelled as percentages, while Spain's €10 figure is recast as a share of earnings. Keep every shopping value in euros and use more natural, precise comparative phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The key rankings and Internet-use figures are accurately selected, but three online-shopping values are reported with incorrect units or interpretation.
State that France, Germany and Spain spent €57, €46 and €10 per person respectively, without converting these figures into percentages or earnings shares.
Coherence and Cohesion
A clear overview and separate treatment of each visual create logical progression, with comparisons integrated effectively throughout.
Make the final shopping comparison more direct so the paragraph moves cleanly from the highest expenditure to the lowest.
Lexical Resource
The response shows good range, but several ambitious phrases, including 'bottomed both of the lists' and 'spared a tenth of their earnings', are unnatural or inaccurate.
Prefer precise combinations such as 'ranked lowest', 'spent per person' and 'was approximately half the UK figure'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentence forms are used with generally strong control, although a few structures are awkward and occasionally obscure the comparison.
Refine concessive and participial constructions so that subjects, comparisons and numerical references remain immediately clear.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts show the info about the use of Internet in five countries in Erope in 2000.
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